Nice

I have just shot blood all over my screen - if I come again my colon will attempt to pop out through my Japs eye. But fuck this poetry is fucking great.

I like cafes in london too.

I hate being western myself. I really wish I was Chinese, or black.

Brilliant, thats all i can say.

Yo mommas so fat, when she sunbathes, greenpeace try and roll her back in!!!! Yo mommas so fat, it takes 3 buses and train to get on her good side! Yo mommas so fat, she needs an asteroid belt! Yo mommas so fat, when she wears stilletos, she strikes oil!!! Yo mommas so fat, when I was fucking her, it took me 7 rolls to get off her!!! Interesting though...7

Ha ha, funny shep - Alex

Still angry children dump 1s. Good to see you drop by from time to time. This one has inspired me to try something new. details. ha! imagine that.

what am I supposed to say to this? good poem? I find no faults or errors. bleh. 9 I'm guessing you probably have something about it (you) don't like.

hard to follow. Ithink there may be more than 2 people involved here. sounds war-like.

Obviously, you (read) poetry. I can only imagine where my poetry would go if I read more poetry. gah. This is well thought out. I can take a lesson here.

and my lesson is creativity when it comes to colors. apricot blush, neopolitan ice cream. excellent.

Ten witnesses; one, to stretch the ten seconds. It is reckoned ten leaps, to let a long drag

a kettle with a pole sticking out?

another new underground quality poet.

bull moo- seems a bit comical. good thought provoker.

two verses are wasted telling us that you are unable to communicate what a tragic death is. The final verse is where the 'poem' starts, it could do with being sharper

not necessarily. the limerick flip is something new. there's an underlying tension between the van driver and the woman. rewrite this and smoothe the rhythm.

a bird in the hand....

Should be neapolitan (as in napoli) I think. Could do with making more snappy to increase the power of your words. phrases like everlasting wind are fairly meaningless, and the use of ebb and flow/ swayed and lapped/ stalking prey are staples of poetry and just obstruct the reader from getting to the more creative and refreshing parts. Overall quite good though.