-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on religion by ThePariahDog
28 Sep 2003, 8:43 AM
Read Soderstrom's new poem (Theology)----it's great!
Stifling, and unbelievably, true.
The ending was as wooded as a prostetic limb from the civil war.
It's interesting to me the way you related the suicide to the work-out class. I would like to see more about how the two are similar.
Very well written, a perfect 10.
maybe you should say "the recently departed" ?? but other than that i like it -8- = )
Um,hello.
Of or relating to a category of poetry that expresses subjective thoughts and feelings, often in a songlike style or form.
Not lyric?
No, and hopelessly contrived along with being barely legible. 10, 10's? please! You obviously are Republican.
It sounds good though, I especially like it for the mechanic stuff. With a name like yours you don't seem like you'd be a mechanic. Good poet though.
Except, the word of THE CRAFTY JESU!
I particularly like the first inversion around lines 5 to 6.
Yes, absolutely, I've smelled mothballs as queer. This is a fine narrative.
Not with that stupid look on your face. The only thing you're going to win is... Seconds.
I like some of the ideas and the memories that you are talking about, but it kind of falls apart and rambles a little towards the end. I bet you could put it together better.
good cutting joe, whats that phrase? "i told you so"
and heres a well deserved eight.
amen. and heres a 10.
hang the song bird
You are my brother, and an inspiring light. Shhhhh... You and I will be fine, and I will teach you what being a man involves. these things that plague your heart i will wipe away like a like bugs on the window. you were meant to be near me, and I have enough love in just the tips of my hair
To keep you safe until you can keep yourself safe. i will be there for you eternal.
I know exactly what you're talking about. In 1978 me a my friend broke into the house of a neighborhood dealer and ripped off his stash. I think we were high for two straight weeks on "Finger Hash", which contained beads of opium. Best fucking high I ever had...and believe me...I've had some (though not for last 25 yrs.). We were going to sell some of the shit...but after the first bong hit...decided to keep it for ourselves. For that 2 week period...that hash was definetely my God!
chasing dragons.
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