Suck You suck You really suck bigtime

15/35 = 3/7

FUCK FUCK FUCK you fist fuck ur loose ass you sniffling bitch. go get some clusure from princess diana who gives a fuck. you cunt from down the street wanting a free ride. bitch wore cry to ur fatha. NIGLET BITCH. your poems SUCK SUCK SUCK harder then you do.

definitely a good idea. it could be better but then again couldn't everything

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we wre the knights who say kni. (0)

someone got daddy issues.

The flow of the poem is very good. i really enjoyed reading it

i totally get the feeling you are conveying. there are some cliches like sheep, etc. but the poem is well composed

sloppy seconds i might add.

we are the knights who say kni (5)

goodness, are y'all never contented? It's a simple mistake! The sad thing is you haven't as much as a social life as would a sea cucumber. You sit in front of your screen tapping away comments that are better used on a blow fish.

The line breaks in this piece are more than just arbitrary - they're annoying. I really don't get poetry at all. You read this piece through, and the language doesn't flow properly because you sort of pause when you get to a line break, and then you realise that it sounds odd if you pause, so you re-read it ignoring all the line breaks this time, so then it does sort of flow, but you realise that all the line breaks did was waste time, and then you end up thinking that the line breaks are there deliberately, and you're actually meant to read it a little stilted or something like that, and then it seems poetic because it has line breaks, but then you realise that actually that's a complete load of bollocks, and all you have is some prose with annoying line breaks. At least that's what my withered, uncultured prawne of a scientific brain splat thought to itself amid chronic pancake dismounts and sporadic recallibration shut-downs. -10-

You will not receive salvation/redemption by being "broken" or taken to task by your earthly or heavinly Father. Self reflection and discipline will get you where you want to go...Then, if you are worthy,.. your "Father" will be willing to converse with you. Stop being a jelly fish! You need a spine to stand up on your own two feet!

Perhaps it might interest you to know that I have rabies.

Wait, are you saying you actually went to a poetry reading place? What did you expect?

Do you write poetry for a living?

Jesus loves you.

Hilarious and somewhat bitter. Ten.

Some times people that cannot follow god's ways and cannot stop themselves must be broken. Then you can follow him wholey. God is always willing and there. What god do you know?