Re: STAN by poetry_rancour	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/10:04 AM
talent...fun to read...:) Bethy
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 75.82.86.162	12-Mar-07/6:29 PM
I like your stretches of words - grouts, lathes - even if they are far-fetched. Shouldn't it be Daimler's?
Re: A Question by poetry_rancour	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/10:05 AM
hehehe lol...and it should be...:) Bethy
regarding some deleted poem...	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/10:06 AM
radio ga ga...old song from many moons ago...still its good :) Bethy
Re: A Question by poetry_rancour	Dovina 75.82.86.162	13-Mar-07/10:21 AM
Beau is a boyfriend. But what is a "boo'? Anyway, a funny thought.
Re: a limerick from kent by nentwined	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	13-Mar-07/11:04 AM
Funnier than AIDS
Re: More and more Shuushin by mr cunt	some deleted user 195.194.75.209	13-Mar-07/10:27 AM
How true.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 75.82.86.162	13-Mar-07/10:33 AM
Welcome to Poemranker. Please ignore the slobs who have splattered this place of late, and realize that before there were some who actually tried to write and to comment. Hang in for a while and see what happens. And btw, this is rather clever and unusual. I especially like "throbbing ovaries/ eggs on legs/ legs on the move."
Re: why? by nentwined	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	13-Mar-07/11:05 AM
tripe of the highst order
Re: On The Gay Beach by Edna Sweetlove	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	13-Mar-07/11:07 AM
Kinky!
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.179.219.225	13-Mar-07/12:03 PM
This is ok. Sonnets are always a difficult discipline. I like the first four lines they skip along jauntily. Loses it a bit after that. Fresh ink smelling in a book. Really? 'Yes him, a potential reader' 'delicate pages long fingers' I just don't think the middle skips along quite as well. The language is not as crisp.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.179.219.225	13-Mar-07/12:18 PM
I guess this is a beat poem. It has the wise-ass descriptions of the world going on around the writer but lacks any interesting episodes or themes. I like 'you me and plurality' as a turn of phrase. Should probably read 'You and I and plurality' it would rhyme too.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 75.82.86.162	13-Mar-07/12:29 PM
It has a good rhythm and a good flow with a few exceptions – “in a daycare” “many books now become a stack” I don’t understand “its a companion that I lack.” It seems it’s a life you do not lack. Do you mean Cheerios, the breakfast cereal; or cheerios, goodbyes? I suspect the former.
Re: Within by drnick	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/9:43 AM
poetic -- 6 :) Bethy
Re: Pedaling West by Dovina	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/9:50 AM
May God grant you with "Buns of Steel" my dear friend...good poem :) Bethy
Re: Just today by MacFrantic	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/9:56 AM
I like this...judgement comes to those who know how the story ends...:) Bethy
regarding some deleted poem...	Bethy 165.154.46.93	13-Mar-07/10:02 AM
Interesting...I like the link between music and making the 10th shot, all by chance and Larry is watching...lol... he just won't turn the music back on til you move on...go ahead...make the basket...the ball is in your court... good poem :) Bethy
Re: STAN by poetry_rancour	richa 81.179.219.225	13-Mar-07/12:09 PM
I don't get the ending. Looks kind of forced.
Re: snacktime by jesslew	richa 81.179.219.225	13-Mar-07/12:11 PM
Don't like the last line. Like the whimsy of 'bananas are edible smiles' and the idiosyncrasy of 'everyone needs potassium.
Re: a limerick from kent by nentwined	richa 81.179.219.225	13-Mar-07/12:23 PM
Interesting subversion. The grammar looks a bit convoluted. Don't get l4.