horus8
on some deleted poem
17 Sep 2003, 2:35 PM
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Faustiatious
here is a star for your 80th poem
perfection. [[eloquently painted]]
pretty good stuff
hello
Beautiful, GQTip Awarde
are you a werewulf
or maybe a vampyre
i like the knight/night thingy
very smart.
aww how sweet. it brought tears to my eyes. *sniff sniff* 10
hahahahaha
I'm liking it a lot better than I did the first time. I couldn't comment last time :P It side tracted a lot...one thing to another and back with conterdiction.
Congrats on making it much better. I'm giving you a 9. I can relate to it.
poemranker getting you down KC? well i hope it gets better. one of my poems is a semi-finalist in a contest going on to the big contest. i hope my poem wins. plus i am getting the poem in the contest published. probably.
i will bless this poem with an 8.
Hush now baby don't gay a kurd. moppas gonna boink you a moccassin waturd.
C notes preferably
Interesting format. Wish I could give you a little better vote. Because it is a good poem...but the repeat of words last to first is a petpev of mine. Just because I won't do it doesn't mean I shouldn't respect someone who does...so what the heck...another 9
line four -- "I konw" type should be "I know"
last two lines -- you could say so much more with less. Perhaps "Where all the earth's warriors,
Have died and joined him."
Or go three lines
Again in the brillany night sky,
all the earths warriors,
Have died and joined him.
Just my opp here hun don't take it to heart. Hope it helps some how :) *hugs* I'm still giving you a ten... I really like the idea.
I enjoyed the poem. I think line one needs to be tweeked a little or what was the purpose of it? "you are dreamer" I almost didn't read on due to that being the first line. I just see my four year old neise saying that to me.
Ha ha ha whoever gave this a blue five is a lesbian vegetarian albanian cock ring of fire, and I didn't fall into.
this should be under 'concrete', no?
do I really have to make an 'ascii art' category?
[[would people use it if I did?]]
la la la.
cute, given its history.
That was just a mighty might boss poem