crwncka1
on hells kitchen by crwncka1
17 Sep 2003, 7:51 PM
i have no clue
eh?
7 for confusing me because I'm tired of giving out 4's.
some nice ideas. I don't feel the flow lends to the feeling of sleep deprivation (even though it may have been created by such; I could find much of one)...
Whoohoo! 9.
screw the rhythm (gently?) I like this. =) [[okay, a little work. but 9 as stands]] I guses that's the mood I'm in?
cute imagery, flow I think could make this really nice. 7.
I like 'too proud to scrawl' (as elsewhere read), though then the wheelchair might need something to replace it.
interesting, though. :) 7.
pullulating?
has a good tone/rhtyhm/feel. 8.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
17 Sep 2003, 6:48 PM
You were raped? Sorry to hear it.
Changing my vote to a (3). cuz it was real.
I really liked this poem..
I am too afraid to tell you which line I liked best.
ah what the hell. it's your iceberg tip caught in my craw..
Devil's tongue chile
Mouthfuls of honey
& mango preserves
hey metallicas st anger CD didnt work for me... he loves I hate.... someone please help me, my brain wont suffocate... heh
is the title 'my 80th poem' important to the piece? and the explanation... why is it there?
'konw' -> 'know'
'viberant' -> 'vibrant'
I'd split the stanza at 'back/Now' and 'forgotten/Now', to leave less confusion. I like the gimmick a bit, though the content is... well, "it's a stage we all go through".
Ask who?