Is this a pimple poem? Ok, I was going to give some gentle suggestions toward improvement until I read, "As long as this all was such." I don't think that is even English. As long as this all was such...makes me feel like I tripped on a speed bump and landed in glass-ridden gravel...and not on purpose either.

?.. -shrug-

Good rhythm. i really like this. Let's see some more 1

you really dont like fat people.. did one accidentally sit on you or something? lol.

heh.

i enjoyed "old and grey/ came the day"

interesting. It ALMOST works really well, but there is something about the ryme that feels forced. Like, it's not exactly what you wanted to say, but the only thing you could put there to complete the rythm. I think you can do better. Good though.

hmmm. I'd say that this poem made me feel like nothing at all...just.............

interesting form of self expression indeed. Strangely though, I like it.

ooooh, I love this one. allow Your mushroom brush to paint me white - Oh man, that's like the second kewlest thing I've ever heard!

I hereby formally withdraw my previous opinions as expressed in the following poems which I posted some time ago. The allegations made in these poems may once have appeared to be true, but now I believe them to be false. -=Dark_Angel_Has_Gone_Missing=- (Free verse) by Edible Underpants The "poete" hasn't logged in Since the twenty-fourth of June Because he's far too busy smacking His bruised bell-end with a spoon. -=Words_From_Dark_Angel=- (Free verse) by Edible Underpants I am the "poete" whom all men fear. They panic and run far whene'er I come near. I'm known to be lewd and I'm prone to take liberties And tell folk about my odd sexual proclivities. When I was a youngster I developed a taste For rubbing warm faeces all o'er my face. I like phallic objects so much I collect 'em I lube them and ram them far deep in my rectum.

liked the first 16 lines

cool set-up

I have only one thing to say: http://www.phespirit.info/fatherted/sounds/that.wav

You are psycho!

Cool- that's an 8 for me

congratulate, but nice

ok. thats cool.

uh...

this line that you love so well is flawed: as the pen, dragged too deep i' the page in passion i' and in are the same? how's: as the pen, heavy with passion, dragged too deep i' the page, gouged it, destroying the subsatntive beauty therein.