Personally I enjoyed the part about the fresh young girl,other than that, well...

if you followed the instructions it wouldnt seem so random

good poem, loved it, you should write more

Sounds like Eminem on an off day.

I find you're poem quite offensive. Its really a personal decision to accept Jesus into you're life, as I do. Their are many religions which are all equally valid. Whom are you to say what is right and what is wrong?

Mr. Pig, I really like your work and have much respect for your opinions. This piece is sharp and descriptive but did leave me with some questions (perhaps I look for more than you intend to reveal). In your eyes is the carpenter on the cross a mere mortal or God incarnate? Is Judas' suicide self-driven or the product God's wrath? P.S. I want to thank you for your kind words, encouragement and well deserved kick in the ass. You were absolutely on the mark in advising me not to abandon this site. Thanks....Joe

Angel, Fair enough, but while you're on your soap box painting with your broad brush, why don't you compose something about lovely Muslims who fly jets into skyscrapers, strap bombs to themselves to kill and maim the innocent, and preach that those who do not accept Alah as the one and only God are infidels worthy of death. I mean at least us Christians are willing to allow God to do his work in the after-life...these nuts want to blow up the world so they can lay thier dirty hands on some untapped pussy! I'll tell ya, between you me and the wall.. I don't think there are 72 virgins in all of the western hemisphere! So get to it with those little hands and bang out a draft... I eagerly await your crafty work. -5-

You are most assuredly a sick fuck,Rot in hell with your jizz crusted crap.

Three brothers... hmm... ...who are you?

And curse you sir, for writing a better poem. But I am currently reworking mine, and it shall resurface here... Too many similarities... must rewrite... >:/ ten, for splitting my arrow.

urm.. i like the other one where i was confused, and needed explaination..

Hey, you leave coke alone. It's my friend and I don't like you and yours bad mouthing it. Just leave off the class A man. Conformists equal death.

Hey, you leave coke alone. It's my friend and I don't like you and yours bad mouthing it. Just leave off the class A man. Conformists equal death.

Brilliant. I want to see more diary entries from you.

Could use a little re-working, but I like it. Strong imagery. 7

I can't imagine what it would sound like in song, but I'm nothing of a song writer. However, it does a make beautiful rhythm as it flows through my thoughts. I like it.

on fire!

of bathtub familiar, how does it go? millions of pages turned noting noting noting i will stop for a second/hold yer breath

An alternative title would be very much appreciated.

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