So I would suggest changing this to 'Pimple' please. Enjoy.

Ashes to ashes, Dust to dust. when these first two lines appear, i get annoyed, because its simply starting out with one hell of an overused phrase.. this just, makes me feel like puking on it. 3

I write what I write because that's what I write. I don't care what the heck the rest of you think. However, I'd like to know where the heck abecederian thinks my spelling is incorrect.

I like the rhythmic patterns and rhyme scheme electro. Rockin' poem.

I like the poem abe. Creative title as well.

The Waiting Room (Free Verse) by -=Dark_Angel=- Hello evil muslim Come in and take a seat Enjoy a cup of coffee Relax; put up your feet I'll just bring up your file To see if thou art just; You don't believe in Jesus!? But the Bible says you must! You shan't be going to Heaven Instead you'll rot in Hell As a vile non-believer We'll break your wicked spell! You'll never taste the splendour Of a Pure and Perfect Place Instead you'll watch your entrails Landing splat upon your face You won't be very happy When we jump on your best friend Or make you drive that scooter Down a road that has no end We'll open up your diary And insert a scrambled egg Then we'll make you give a sermon With it trickling down your leg And just in from Head Office Our request has been approved! To have your nostrils fisted And your bollocks both removed I hope you'll learn your lesson As well as have a lovely stay Then maybe next time you will listen To what the Bible has to say.

what if i'm jewish? am i invalid?

great job once again... roses are red violets are blue i wish i was a poet just like you

barrister, not lawyer, a gentleman would not end a sentence with a preposition (for) an horrible, an other bloody is misused--gory would be more connotively correct the Land; no need to name England; a gentleman would know the kingdom to which one referred. who-knows-who is the vernacular of the guttersnipe the last stanza is quite laughable. if you are going to endeavor to demean a body from within their own milleau, you should at least attain some familiarity with usage before proferring such an attempt.

i do not believe tat it was the nourishment you would not let drip away, but rather, the sweetness. yes?

You lost me at the end there, and it's (pane) when referring to a window. All in all I think you're going to be a fine poet. Welcome to 'Poem Wanker'

hanging/hung? why were you satisfied, and yet, the squirrel could get more from it? this makes a metaphor and then sends it packing, to the unemployment office. why?

even though it was a nectarine?

Well done Electro, Makes me miss mine as well

I once slipped on a bannana peel, and it cried louder than me. But that was the day I found out I had no neck to brake or break. I did however crunch my beak.

Fuck god and fuck you, no really, I'm kidding I write poetry like this a lot when I feel, SATAN is working against me or through me like in the summer of sixty poo when I was alone and depressed. that's when I found heaven was the backseat of ford granada with a heater called 'windows'.

It certainly is an ace poeme. I really like the use of "dying" to rhyme with "crying"! But hey I have a question about Christ. If lots of people pray for something, is Jesu more likely to answer the prayer than if only one person prays? Thanks!

You were right. Thank you.

Spelling, please. I myself am agnostic but I'm not going to trash you just because you believe in some religion. What I will say is that (on this site at least) you should expect to be ridiculed. This ridicule will occur for three reasons: your style is abecedarian, you do not check your spelling, and your thoughts will be considered naive or at least unoriginal. If you are trying to perfect the 'praise'. That is to say if your real intent is to bring glory to some ideal you have, you are really going to have to work harder. You can't just say majesty, you have to make people feel it. It honestly makes me wonder whether you believe in god less than I do.

Indeed