what is the wrong question?

I like it.

Very Funny

Peekaboo

Look horatio, now you have one poopy blue welsh vote and a poopy blue government fag vote. I see you poopies and I think your blue votes are poopy. So now I will perform for you my yawn of poop =:0> Now wasn't that entertaining?

not sure about this one. hm.

a very pithy version of Genesis? Very nice.

This is great--amazing lines and flow; really lyrical and creative. Most excellent first line. Burial and ritual and dust and history--you just weave this incredibly. I think it'd be even better if you ended on "engines"--the last line is too "here's my point!" and it's almost generic in contrast to the rest of this. This is terrific.

The first stanza is great--the rest not quite up to it, but still really well done overall.

flesh without corpulence, sinewless muscle, afloat despite the lack of gravity: chatter, pearls, chatter. brava!

sometimes i forget you are 16. sometimes, this world you speak of walks over to me. invites me. envelopes me. but then i remember: i am copper. or was it gold?

Bah--a 5? FoG is right--you nailed the image of Biblical times really well, and the way you tell it--clear, simple, no stupid archaisms-- is perfectly suited to the story. Have a 10.

Jezus, you're 16? Fucking ay.

it takes talent to tag your own poem. nice work.

may i suggest some ideas to help shape this more to your ends? macro-cosmic trinitron--light pollution remote: an inconstant red dwarf sighted from your observatory, your bed/sofa expanding universe/binary stars and so on so the the analogy is more clearly drawn between astronomy and computer electronics.

I have a hole im my toe that goes well with China.

nice job. the word "nearly" in the title bothers me, though.

this need more meet (pun intended)

I liked it and should have said so sooner. I also got it , except I wasn't led to believe the screen was blank. I dunno. Isn't it (nentwined) to the east? Or is it west? Where is the nentwined system, anyway?