Shardik
on Popularity by Ditchamal
5 Aug 2003, 12:45 PM
Neither, it's Stridex.
:'(
de HABilitated man.
a kind of pass note poetry,
Seems like a cleaner edit.
I needed to smile today
Shitknee (crumple) by Batdiary
I halved no feeled her anglic touche
Witch haze too be so gracing
Nor thy warming halved hair lipstinsteins
Nordic her sweat embared ace.
This pitcher I retained
Beholds her fece so fair
The flingings that I halved for her
Is one I cunât exploit
One thing of heres is so supert
No other butt her personallyty
That it is ale I need to feel up her louver
Not some dressinged up fucking china dolte
Shardik
on A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom
5 Aug 2003, 11:52 AM
Your first statement is powerful, you need to have her with eyebrows and fourteen or twelve toes by the end, or you'll story will die, worthless. Once again your first line sets the pace, so deliver the goods that's what we're interested in. Why, How, who, where, we know when and who you are already, you mentioned ghost town so get there man.
My brand of wierd. Smell ya later.
a little self indulgent and trivial for a poem about drug addiction.
Would it be offensive of me to suggest you are not an addict?
This is such a great poem.
No shit dude. I was raised by prawnes actually. Did you know the one thing a prawne fears most is an EXOSKELLINGTON?
I love "frenzied victim" I had to read this poem a few time out loud because tounge hit teeth so nicely.
"His girlfriend left him for some guy who could drive," Quite possibly the funniest line imaginable. But if you destroy the Angel, I'll have nothing to do?
Idealy haiku should appeal to at least two of the five senses. It's something I don't do every time either.
this is a lyric. and a damn fine one at that.
JoyLuck
on A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom
5 Aug 2003, 1:39 PM
no eyebrows and a cameltoe sounds more interesting and diverse...haha...i just don't like how 13 sounds.
what I enjoyed most was the vision of humanity and nature the questions and statements that were given. I very beautiful peice
That was beautiful Baba Yaga. It really touched me. Go Kurby! (>'o')>
there. now that's a succinct whole. nicely done.