This is great. Inventive rhyme scheme and phrasing, and such great images. This is inspiring.

LMMFAO!!! I was only hoping for a Comment on the poem, not a whole poem! Props. JB, You made my day. -10-

I respect the pathos but this really lacks focus.

Wow.. You do suck. I mean even at sucking. This is merely Mediocore. Not good, not bad. Just there.

Excellent writing. -10-

To bad, son, and I'm not your friend. My friends know how to spell 'lightning', idiot.

Interesting. Just for kicks.. Fuck = Fornification Under Consent of King Ponder that one.

Touching, but more details please. Why is this Joe So important to you, Who the hell is he? That type of stuff.

It might be scarey. But, it might be better, too. I don't believe in the myth that an artist has to be in pain to do good work. That is what our memory is for. Take a 7 for reminding me of how terrifying it is to grow up and how much better I am for having done it!

I think the last stanza stands best alone. It would be shorter, sweeter and stronger.

Usually, one must possess something in order to lose it. Glad to see you bucking trends. Maybe what you thought was a poetic edge was actually a ruptured strawberry flavored condom, and now your face is pregnant?

Disabled (Pooku) by -=Patio_Chair=- No! A rubber stamp On my welfare envelope! Drinking on my porch.

awww lil wabbit, dont worry, i got a case of writers block aswell.. after the monk and ballerina poems my brain had an overload and short circuited... lets just say my heads a bowl of fried shrimp. ;P

Look.. if you had.. one shot, or one opportunity To seize everything you ever wanted.. in one moment Would you capture it.. or just let it slip? Yo.. His palms are sweaty, knees weak, arms are heavy There's vomit on his sweater already, mom's spaghetti He's nervous, but on the surface he looks calm and ready to drops bombs, but he keeps on forgetting what he wrote down, the whole crowd goes so loud He opens his mouth but the words won't come out He's chokin, how? Everybody's jokin now The clock's run out, time's up, over - BLAOW!

hahaha that was great also people who give anonymous zeros are pussies

Holy shit! And I thought Garden of Evil made me suffer... It's fine to pine for lost love but, tell us what you miss, give us some images, make us think on it. To say you miss someone doesn't constitute poetry unless you strive (harder) to make us relate and "feel" for your loss.

Wow, you are certainly at the peak of your creativity!!!!!!1 A pity the same can't be said of your maturity, Jeremi. Or should I say Jewremi. Jew.

Well, it's not quite as good a parody as SARS but it was still a chuckle.

i understand ... i currently have nothing to offer maybe it's cuz i never had it or it's all this weed i've been smoking or the weed i have not been smoking maybe it's cuz we both live in the same boring state

no, FUCK YOU