Carvaceous
on Tawn-tastic by Topaz Servias
3 Jul 2003, 11:11 PM
It's....tawnfabulous??
Pure class porkie ass, roast this 10
Very good poem.
Your need help.
Fuck. I'm weeping right now because this poem has single handedly changed my life. Thank you. 10!
Margaret, did you blue six poor Baba out of symbolic feminism, or mysogenistic lesbianism? watch this i'll give myself a zero and weep on your boob.
a crap poem masqueraded in a foreign language to try and make it look better 0
I just think you excel at describing stuff, this is soaked in beautiful verse 8
Who the fuck cares about this shit? Write something at least funny this is just a boring point of view and who do you think gives a toss? no offence but i care for the users as much as they care for me, i want to read poetry not opinions so stephen take your fingers on a vacation to the delete button. 0
A bit saccharin like, its not poo but a bit like the verses in the 50 cent card shops 4
fine selection of language, the traditional with the new
the final line is good about the sword through the ventricles of a heartland. Streams as veins. I think the pneumatic part is mixing metaphors though.
this is definitely one of your best
Only you can do a Haiku with a title like this. Your f****g nuts but I'm nuts for your stuff 8
No dots are needed between JCB
Very nice images.
this needs a bit more of you in it, the lack of originality detracts from the feeling you want to get across.
what I do like about this is the rhythm and sonority, even though you don't appear to be explicitly rhyming your words.
This reminds me of one of those cards you would give your teacher, when everyone would sign it, remember? When they would be sick, and dying and beeping in a gernie? Well, unfortunately, I unlike those others who have left the heat of the kitchen, am a professional chef. I am prepared to never leave. I have a legacy of poetry to archive & I'm quite happy here in my studies. Carry on people, and know that I was personaly moved be your heart felt testimonials and observations of our under appreciated relationships. You have all touched me deeply. Thank You, and God bless you. And God Bless America.
Hi its hte cunt here,
You are not Horus, Bachus or Jermi Handrinos so you are the cunt, I mean click in to your user name and you've wrote one poem? the real jeremi b handrinos has written loads of poems,
as i respect horus this is his vindication from any misinterpreted slurs on his good character,
yours sincerely
the cunt cadUcus
Very wanky.