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on of the bad hard drive by david
4 Jul 2003, 1:52 PM
lol.
Crafty.
Profound.
irreverent, funny role reversal
do you mean L-DOPA in the title?
the drug given to people with parkinsons that made them all schizophrenic
An honorable path. A good poem.
reads well.
heavily influenced by biblical imagery I think
painful in nature/ubiquitous in effect is a nice play on words
nice simple words to build a picture, not too tied to loaded terms
Yeah, you're a really good poet. Superb collection really.
I'm reminded of how Aristotle once said that man, like elephants and bees, are inherently political animals.
This is uite simply briliant, how are you doing steve ?I have been drinking now for six hours and I hope you are still at work mofo.
Upbeat for once, fucking hell HORUS, by the way ...7.
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A wonderful piece in the tradition of concrete and typographical poetry. Well done.
Technically inept. Seeing as how it's a piece with no real intent or content, I think it ought to be rated in a similar fashion.
You're good. Have A HUT awarde. 10
12,000 but who's counting. An enjoyable read.
Distinctive.
The repetition in this piece is delightful and well-crafted. There are certainly many cases of repetition ruining a poem, but this certainly isn't one of them.
Nobody does it better. Nebarska. No a/c.
Hotel 'puter. Shouldst I say HOSTILE?
Life sucks without the 'ranker.
I'm sorry, what? Can you speak a little louder, please? I had something pointless in my ear.
Aside from the sugary-sweet sentiment and the reminders of Celine Dion songs, it's certainly well-crafted from a technical standpoint. You haven't had to sacrifice diction for the rhyming scheme, and the metre is well-chosen and well-maintained. All in all, not a bad ditty.
I'm inclined to give a higher rating, if only because vilanelles are so difficult to write well. You've taken to the structure, and the narrative flow of the piece is intriguing.