ropeytrajectory
on some deleted poem
24 Jun 2003, 9:48 AM
BRAIN ENO'S JIZZ IN YOUR FAGGOT EYE
What about T-paper, this is way worse then my insanity.
Thank god for modern plumbing.
OUCH!!!
Wow dude, next time, use both barrels.
excellent flow
nothing that really grabs me though, it was over so fast
Precisely.
To dark for no reason, remove your last sentence entirely, and it would find the lowest level, trust me, I know.
yes this needs much shortening,
the twists for me are the creative uses of language in between the babble
but there is lots of good stuff
quite good
im not sure the two verses necessarily hang
like a landscape painting really, which is difficult to express in poems ask bob dylan
Phil, I know that the demons are the people of this world and that you mean that you shouldn't listen to what everyone says. But, why at the end do you stay with the demons in your head.
It's sad, but thats how I feel sometimes. Then I realized that with willpower and education you can change your own destiny.
Because it's not, it's a virus called SCARS
"Thank god for modern plumbing." Otherwise we'd all be wearing a diaper (nappy) living in the cave of denial like -=Dick_Bagel=- trying to talk bats into forming us a wheel chair ramp out of guarra and lime.
There are some brilliant twists and observations in here. Compact it by 50%. find and correct some typos and misspells. And there could be a couple of structural improvements.
Listen Bachus,
I know you mean well, but since people suspect that you're really me (not) this comes across as being just a bit conceited and creepy. Do me favor, please do not discuss my past without filling out the appropriate paper work for a proper license and waivers.
Thanks, carry on, drunk.
wow dude i like that alot ur pretty good
Cheese grater? Don't you mean a cotex.