*piffy*

Oh God, it really happens! And I thought I was the only one!

From a poetic standpoint: tangible(comma)even drop the (but)last line of s-2. I read this aloud and almost cried. I think this is destined to knock me off. I'm inspired to do some houscleaning on "tingling".

Poor, mr. B, very poor... Like "Stuck To The Hob", but less classy. Much less classy.

Your shit. Bobjim looks like the Shake' compared with this effort. Do you even know what a haiku is?

Hmmm, follow-through!

oh shit,

0, and 0 again if I could

spun around and passed out did ya? killer ending. I needed a laugh. Thanks.

Getting there.

Bold as ever, perhaps a little alice in wonderland in its focus on detail and fantasy Perhaps try making it a bit shorter brevity and wit and all

The best word in here is "anf' which, where I come from, means <toot>.

yes I agree this is kind of wild and it works well But I do think the word crimson in poetry should be banned Other than that good

yes i like the structure, and rhyming fingers and nimbus is genius well done

Politicians and cops should have to take piss tests weekly.

This one put me right there in it.

Beautifully enticing in its description, you have me wowed.8

Bar a few there is some fine poems on the current entries today, this is no exception and the delivery of each line has a message and I loved it. But do punks really sneer?

Every line contains something which is utterly wrong.

Grainy.