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Shuushin 65.175.177.241 |
15-Jan-07/5:31 AM |
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winterS...yields wtf?
lots of noise simply for the concession of rhyme - for example, if you removed "in the day" and "on their way" and why not, "and say" - there is absolutely no meaning lost and the thing is so much better for it.
plenty of what, exactly, from nature[']s quiver? And what does the warmth and light deliver? Birds?
and yes, that indentation... have you every had anything published with that indentation intact?
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| Re: Brains for Barter by Dovina |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
15-Jan-07/5:32 AM |
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I've had wind which has resulted in the runs. Terrible, you have my sympathy; although I wouldn't condone publicising the fact.
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Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
15-Jan-07/5:38 AM |
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As satisfying as a bowl of tramp trifle and as wholesome as a plate of corpse mustard.
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Shuushin 65.175.177.241 |
15-Jan-07/5:39 AM |
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Ginger sprinkled orchid is interesting. The rest. Is not.
I've made programs that grab random adjectives, adverbs, nouns in semi-random sequences to produce poetry. This is like that. Sometimes you get surprised, sometimes not in a good way.
The government uses something similar to name wars - I hope someday we see "Operation Ginger Sprinkled Orchid".
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| Re: Fury by wilco |
Prince of Void 213.207.253.125 |
15-Jan-07/7:26 AM |
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Good job ..it's a great poem
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| Re: A Fart For All Mankind by Edna Sweetlove |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/8:53 AM |
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Dr Toilet likes this one as he likes toilet things!
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| Re: Edna's Video Library by Edna Sweetlove |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/8:54 AM |
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Dr Toilet likes this one as he likes rude things! And sex too!
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xxx 67.172.190.253 |
15-Jan-07/8:55 AM |
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| Re: George and Samson by Edna Sweetlove |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/8:55 AM |
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Dr Toilet likes this one as he likes things about bottoms!
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| Re: Grafton Street Late Joys by Engelbert Humpalot |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/8:56 AM |
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Dr Toilet likes this one as he likes toilet things and filth!
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| Re: Blind Fart by Blind Fart |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/8:57 AM |
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Dr Toilet likes this one as he likes toilet things!
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| Re: Fragrant Love by Engelbert Humpalot |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/8:58 AM |
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Dr Toilet wanks when he reads things like this!
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| Re: Oh to be a Scot! by Donald McFuck |
Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/9:00 AM |
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Dear Toilet feels sympathy for you!
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Dr Toilet 194.154.22.36 |
15-Jan-07/9:01 AM |
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Dr Toilet thinks this is unpleasant
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Edna Sweetlove 85.210.236.239 |
15-Jan-07/11:15 AM |
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This is really not very good, but I have come to expect nothing less from you, dearie. I shall be generous in my marking and give it 1/10.
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| Re: Same old rancour (a yellow stream of consciousness) by ecargo |
richa 81.178.91.116 |
15-Jan-07/2:10 PM |
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I like pratfallen. To fall on one's buttocks. Very apt.
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| Re: Fanatic by Dovina |
richa 81.178.91.116 |
15-Jan-07/2:18 PM |
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Is this about how people who know things mock people who don't know things because people who know things have not received 'gentleness'. I think it is.
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| Re: A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90 |
15-Jan-07/4:08 PM |
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Line 5: do you REALLY not know the difference between "lay" and "lie"? How fucking tragic.
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| Re: Starving at Tiffany's by horus8 |
Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90 |
15-Jan-07/4:09 PM |
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How about capitals for "I" ? 1/10 and be grateful.
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Dr Toilet 85.210.196.90 |
15-Jan-07/4:10 PM |
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I would just like to say what a great and original piece of writing this is, but I would be a liar. It's tripe.
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