Caducus
on Be Not Afraid Of Dying. by Mr Pig
12 May 2003, 8:09 AM
not your best but still good and a message of hope that i liked 8
Kiss ass. We all know how much I despise the womb, but I'm willing to let this slide today. 8.
My favourite part? When you rhymed jow with now and move with move. Enlightening.
You are awesome at freeform, but your haikus are consistently off. this one's 5 7 6.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
11 May 2003, 8:12 PM
Appreciate has and "e" after the "r" and not and "i." Besides that, not bad. -6
WOOOOOOO!!! Go you, so good, i love it, very funny, have yourself a trophy.
yes I like the tone of the haiku, seems to work with the sentiment.
Also its reasoning is very succinct
Find better rhymes, stop using "I", make it a little longer because there is no chorus I don't know what else cause the song sounds like you have experience being a reject (just playing)
It's great. if you wrote it.
Chirtelie durp dew wurp.
A friend and I overdosed on nutmeg once. It was fiercely unpleasent to say the least.
When you were at the MENSA center proving your Masonic doctrine on doctrines legitimate did you play pocket pool while staring at small underdeveloped asian breasts while listening to Sigh? Because witch, I'm impressed.
Nice, I can find a nice tune for this, probably one of your best.
Not to shabby, nice work (8)
This is a great poem i think you should exhibit some of your other stuff as well... Your a great writer, i never knew you had stuff on this site. Well i hope you add to your poems id love to read others. ~Savannah~
lol.
hillarious
Because, you are an android.