Ranger
on Jared Leto & Apocalyptic poetry. by Shardik
26 Apr 2003, 4:08 AM
Wow you really want to let your opinion out...don't let me stop you.
Yes. Yes, I hide your fear with sheer terror i'm sure no one will notice because of your finely crafted imagery and multi layered brilliance. huh hmmm. A genitalman sneezes not without his kerchief, sir. Which makes you raga muffin at best. unless, of course you wear long sleeves to cover the scars and wipe your nose all in one stroke. then you would be a prophet without a god with a frozen mars bar.
Once I had a lemonade stand that only served to the four legged. But then it got impounded by the law.
I opened up a Bagel shop and named it after that jew with the funny hair that graphed light. To only then turn around and sell Kale.
good, but I would end losing the last line instead for another line of impeccably aloof metaphors.
Andd the one armed man claps out an opus. Then collapses in terror and despair.
Sorry, my friend Mr Pig dude, but this is two syllables over for a haiku. Perhaps if you changed 'lacerated' to 'ripped', or even 'torn' (to go with 'thorns' albeit badly) then you will be 1 syllable under the limit (this is beginning to sound like we're talking about drink-driving now). Then I reckon you could turn the first 'like' into 'as if' which would take you to exactly 17 and would eliminate the repetition of like. That's my opinion anyway.
Aside from that, I enjoyed this haiku, the laceration and bleeding was well done, and you got the element of sadness spot on. Good stuff. I won't vote now, I will let you digest my thoughts and decide what you want to do and hopefully later I'll come back and take another look.
"hard race." would be better as 'embrace' because well, what in the fuck does confusion and love have to do with racing. There is no race, that's an illusion better left to children that race themselves.
A MEN!!! no I mean A-MEN no really... they're a-men the best. lemmeseee... HERE it is...Dewie Cheatham and Howe. They're the best!
Have I ever told you about about my third nipple?
It's to go up and down upon smelling pork in five minutes. I also give a fine pedicure.
"PLANT RENOVATION DESIGN Services
Jones Station/Nichols Station/Plant X Controls Upgrades
Amarillo/Lubbock/Earth, Texas, USA
Project Owner:
Southwestern Public Service Company, Amarillo, Texas
Completion Date:
1993 (Jones), 1995 (Nichols), 1997 (Plant X)
Constructed Project Costs:
$8.2 million (Jones), $4.6 million (Nichols), $3.6 million (Plant X)
Project Background and Description:
The Jones Station controls upgrade consisted of replacing existing boiler, turbine and balance of plant control system for both 250 MW gas/oil fired boilers and steam turbines. The new control systems are based around Foxboro distributed control subsystem (DCS) hardware and a Woodward Governor Netcon 5000 turbine control subsystem. The CRT-based operator interface is through a UE-designed custom console that places the touch-screen CRTs within easy reach and provides absolute minimum key-stroking for operator interface to controls, alarms, data aquisition, sequence of events and burner management. UE also designed a unique window-box alarm presentation system which included "smart alarming" based on process conditions. Automatic turbine start-up (and loading) is controlled by rotor stress calculations running in the DCS system. This provides minimal rotor life expenditure during start-up and load changes. The retrofit also included replacing most field devices. The project at Nichols Station, similar in size and scope, included modifying the feedwater heater controls and extraction drains to meet ASME water induction protection guidelines. The project at Plant X, also similar in size and scope, included installation of new cable to connect all the field devices to the DCS.
Project Features/Characteristics:
Boiler, turbine an balance of plant control system replacement
UE-designed custom consoles and alarm displays
Upgrade to distributed control system
Services Performed
Planning/budget and schedule estimate
Detailed engineering design
Installation supervision
Check-out/start-up/tuning
As-built documentation"
It makes me sad sometimes
this thing called life.
Real sad.
But then I crack open a bag of
Dorittos, pop the top on a cold
pepsi, and watch bangbus and
three's company re-runs.
then i go to the store and buy
beef jerky that comes in a can
like chew.
then you know what?
I fucking chew.
then i dookie
doo.
do
se
do.
I really don't mean to burst your bubble, but i don't care very much for your attitude Sir, Ganus. Every genitiled man host knows one should not serve up cold soup without flaming duck.
Maybe twas that I didn't vote well here's a fucking ten. I feel like coffee, anyone else feel like an espresso?
"shores" to shoes and demise to "flagella", because then, I believe, and bear with me here, that you would force the reader... To die, or better even, maybe explode.
I once one a gold medal, and when I got home it exploded and ripped off my face and legs, now i'm the hunchback of an all black sorority in Houston called semen pie alpha cherry delta semen seme see. the girls throw me my snaks in handmade paper airplanes.
In the beginning God said there was light, and in the end there was still light, but in the middle there was angels and dinosaurs getting it on with their star wars.
Hence the velcro, correct?
In the deepest darkest depthiest parts of the deeper waters of the deep Ocean... There are fish that fish.
I threw a slumber party once, and we all climbed under the covers of my water bed and sang west end girls and east end boys. Yeah, I threw that party... Right out the window.
This did however give me a chuckle.
Sliders vs. a sale on menudo cd's. Hmmm. Clean up in isle 666.