poetandknowit
on Three Pennies of Garbage by babyBOOMER
10 Mar 2003, 11:10 PM
I refuse to vote on any of your poems until you tell me what Z looks like naked playing the fiddle. Write a poem about that!
Another in the long line of "I am misunderstood, really this is genius" crap you write. Dude, Stan Rice is dead. It is yours for the taking!!!!!!!!
Oh lynn, give me that fucking blankey before I go nuts on you. I am super tough you know. hahahahahah.
Whatever.
what is the box? why do you keep calling it a box? is it an icecube?
I don't really like Wendy's answer. I also don't like that they know they're characters in a book. Maybe if you made is something that actually worked with the way the story goes (He escapes for a while but then gets pulled back in a la Hook) Wendy's answer would be better. Just having her tell him that he can't change things doesn't work for me.
By the way "trap" in the 4th line from the end should be "trapped"
Really, are you serious or just a misguided four-year-old who has access to mommy's computer for 15 minutes a day?
Great use of cheese ball rhyme. This is like a techno pimple poem! Why are you lablank ! !! and !!!? Did you really think we need to read all of these fantastic poems at once and could not wait a week for more? Oh baby, give me more. I want Leblank IV.
Some good, some bad. Think about the metaphor you are trying to create and the expound on it. It is not as if it is an easy thing to do. If you want to be a good writer, you have to pour over your work.to make sure everything is connected. Make sure it all makes sense. Just ask DA.
Trust me, five blue tens does not make this poem any better than a litter box full of cat pooh. It is horrible, through and through! But congrats on the high rating and the top 15 spot. You are the Barbara Courtland of poem ranker!
Big words, decent flow, fine images, but the poem feels a bit forced. Like a generic observation. But, I am drunk so don't mind me.
this fleshing out of e-liaison-- find something better!
Find another word for disarmed.
bled me, -- I still do not understand this, but I am will to try! It sounds kinky!
I think you have finally knocked out the ending. Now, no more of the bullshit that you are not writing or struggling with writer's block. There is no such thing. Sometimes we just have to work harder.
A poor attempt at imitating Dark Angel while still sounding like the goof of a poet cadacus! Crap all around!
You really do not have a clue as to what you are trying to say, do you?
The first line ruined everything!
Seas of blood is goofy. The incessant repetition is goofy. The reference to Bob Marley is goofy. Why are you leblank #3. That is goofy!
I thought you were gone for good. That was the message that was delivered to me. I spent a month wandering the Pacific in a leaky boat broken hearted all because of you. And now, you come back! To be damned. Newfies are so fickle!
I see after a month and a half you still write like shit! Such originality in writing that way though! Good job, dickhead!
where can an answer be found?
Ahh.. someone gave you the classic "I'm a dick so I'll vote 0 with no reasoning." vote. I liked it though. Sad but determined not to be. Fatalism without resignation. 6.