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on The Guardian, page nineteen by Nicholas Jones
5 Mar 2003, 10:48 AM
wonderful
do they eat asian pears in asia, or just in NYC and cali?
:)
Is it your connotation that squeezes at my or the plot. hmmm. Should i vote, or hmmm. love him love him not love him love him him not love. 10!
A good effort! Though the idea that anything of asian origin could bring with it a "welcome breeze of sweet escape" is both arrogant and racist. I shan't be recommending this piece to my many asian colleagues.
yes:
dodos. hawks. pigeons.
no:
peacocks. chickens. dinosaurs.
High school was tough for me, too. I really liked your poeme a lot, and found it very moving. Don't listen to immature loin bags like horus8 - just keep writing what you feel inside and tell others to shit off. Just be true to yourself. I have contemplated sewercide myself, usually when I'm feeling a bit depressed. I'd love to hear your comments on my poeme:
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
these could be turned into successful song lyrics... :-)
shit. bleed tears all over me, and not a kleenex in situ. still negative? good. have a 9.
i k ow we t ied. .
s iff niff bli f.
here's a shaved peach for your troubles, troubled one. oops.
Oh Shardik you do make me snigger Sir, you have got your hands full on this one but remember not to wear your baseball cap backwards, the constabulary will think one is a thug and put you in a cell with hairy itinerant Slovakian belles.
Curses ! where did one leave the bloody comerband, I am off to play canasta my dear boy - farewell now. -7
bravo, bravo. you should be proud of this. Can I use this in one of my classes? (I am a teacher)
I feel you have rightfully mastered this genre of writing. You have a gift for detailing moments and presenting them with aplomb. I jolly well wish you the best and this you have ordained this quite masterfully.
I bequeath thee a 9.
Bravo !
Jolly Hockey sticks I really felt I was in the picture, you've managed to bring this to life admirably. I do hope that your greek good sir because I have collaborated a trilogy of greek tradgedy and would adore you for your comment.
Thank you in advance.
Pig / Mr
8
I say this is rather splendid but its a complete deviation from your other works, one feels however this more playful than a poem aimed to satiate.
Indulge yourself on a 7,
Jolly well done !
Grimey, like a shuffle in the downtown sludge, open bardoors breathing the stink of liquor
and piss
and old men, their pockmarcked skin flaking hopeless desire.
"Dead is the drunkest that you can get,
but I haven't been that drunk yet."
-Martin Tielli
my guts feel wobbley
You're no poet you're just a man without shame.
Oh Golly !