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on The Flight of Childhood by Ellie95
2 Mar 2003, 5:06 PM
That only works for humans.
Poor old Jack. A good limerick, but not yours. A 4
stanza 2 line 1: "shown"
A few of your "I"s need caps
The 3rd and 4th stanzas just seem out of place.
I like it but it needs work. (6 with the abilty to be worked up to an 8)
If you weren't me i would rape your mouth with a skunk and a sling shot, bastard.
Good green kelp.
Hmmmm....Topic isn't great. Style isn't great. Poem isn't great. I think I do detect a pattern. I expected better from you.
Next?
Captain Le choadke is dead, prawnes no longer care, but i fear homosexuality in this case is a huge factor, a rift if you will, between the urge to suck penis, and yet the other urge to retreat into his mother's vagina? perhaps you can suck cock in your mother's vulva... splendid, and rewarding i bet.
The only thing that ruptured was the zit on your chin that you wrote this with, and her fucking mouth. Otherwise, he was moved undaunted by the fact the boat sank, it being insured, and also that he could swim quite easily, to shore being an olympian and friend of Neptunes.
I guess when da isn't a wheelchaired fag he's a heterosexual with a fine taste for 'the womem of the bangbus'? What a scholar, and an insightful provider of cutting edge pornography. Better watch your sugar levels sport! We wouldn't want you staining the litmus paper with your grasp on reality.
Did ya play the banana game,when ya was younger,red neck.
I really enjoyed this poem,if you were a femme. I mate ya.
hiya sarah, tis me. Gr8 poem, and im not just saying that, but then you know i love all your poems
Michael Hutchinson Rocks!!!!!!!!!
That was swell.
A great substitute for the last line would bed
Though her peg round my hole square.
Bill Z. Bub breaks into song:
"666 the Number of the Beast
666 the one for you and me"
-Iron Maiden, "The Number of the Beast"
Ah, nothing like the classics.
EXPECTED!
This is you, isn't it?
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Jeremi B. Handrinos
on Tribute to the greatest ever American poem by Garrett S Sexton
2 Mar 2003, 12:26 PM
I think your last stanza did the splits.
I KNOW A GAY HUNTSMAN,
BUT THANX TO Tony B, HE'LL BE OUT OF A JOB SOON.
Is that ya dad?
I give 10