<{Baba^Yaga}>
on Suicidal thoughts by CrAzYlAdY Surukain
24 Feb 2003, 4:02 PM
yes, i agree, suicide is perfect for you.
cool.
yall need to go to www.poemsbybastards.com its more of yalls type of thing
ok you people scare me you really need some mental help!
Line 3 constricts the message, but ding dong well done on a fine piece my lord heres your mark ```9
i went and checked my dictionary, and this became much funnier, here's an upgrade. 9.
so....dare I say...bad?
plagued by typos (such as "traped" and "tstay"), it makes it tough to read and detracts from any poetic quality. cut the redundancies and tighten up your language. try some images--similes, metaphors--fresh ones not "daggar of fate" trite stuff. push yourself. don't be afraid.
YAWN. bo-ring. theraputing wring is a nice thing to do, but too often folks think it is good for sharing. keep these to yourself. write about something new.
Simplistic rhymes, piss-poor spelling and cancer whining. blahblah, tell it to a therapist.
get out of the trailer park, find some nice boy/girl who isn't on the same branch of your family tree, learn to spell and come back when you can write. Next!
That's actually pretty good. I rarely eat chocolate and wear no diamonds. it helps the karma a little.
i dont understand why all you people have to be rude about everyones poems i mean like all of yours are perfect
is this like some kind of devil worship site or something or are all yall people in la la land or something?
Don't be discouraged. Keep trying. We are all trying.
Hope it wasn't something I said. :)
Nice use of form, a bit heavy on the assonance--beware of sounding too sing-songy. 6.
That's pretty good. I was expecting shit. What kind of fish do you have? I have a snow flake eel and a parrot fish they are loads of fun. WAIT... you have an ichthyusaurus in the [pool and your old lady's skinny dipping dressed up as a HAREM GIRL THAT YOU PURCHAESED FOR A DIME BACK IN COLLEGE when you learned the word diaphanous, yes friend this is a sad and common them. i'm going skiing. see you.
This entire series is money, my friend. Well done.
I have a room and two day ski pass at bear mountain. We are expecting a foot in a half of snowsky. This poem is nucking futs & a pyle of shite. i like pregnant chick boobies , in my mouthsky.
you should fear that this is garbage