razorgrin
on For you, I'd make meatloaf by Venus
13 Feb 2003, 9:00 PM
Clever. The use of food is brilliant. Food symbolism is wondrous.
The day she had to go
or, the day that she said, "no".
would finish this stronger, perhaps?
really touching
HA HA HA HA HA HA HA
Very funny.
it's...10(anonymous and known!)
if you tried to edit it, you failed miserably.(b),that is the most shab-ass grade school attempt at a comeback I've ever read. worse than the rubber/glue thing. The poeme is bad. face it. last, I will continue to rank how I choose, sir.
This is a great piece of writing though it could be argued that its not conformist to poetry, thats why I like it, and the message here. Listen, ignore poetandknowitall he loves to criticize and hates to praise, some us are trying to drag poetry into to the 21st century he's in tights and pants reading anglo saxon poetry, fuck it, keep your individuality, ---9
Home wrecker. trampe, juste be straite... now that has a hell of a ring to it... to bad i'm 'the gaye'.
Yes, as limonade and I are compiling them using the format of the vagina monologues and interviewing assorted penis-bearers. so don't take our feckin' ideas or i'll cutcha.
This was so almost there... the last line tosses it though.
Yes, this is very good. GQT runner up. 9. only because i hate meatloaf... for some reason as a child i thught that it was buffalo meat.
What are you talking about? No really, what are you talking about?
Amen. You are such an inspiration.
It's Gardener. Some if these are hysterica,l especially the first.
You are a writer no doubt. Stupid boy, believing you could change even one thing. They will laugh at you, naive and idealistic. This is not so much a man's world, as a cynic's. Good dear boy, speak, and I shall listen. There are many things expressed here which are beyond the comprehension of fools. Pay no attention to the half-wits. Speak your speak. Bang your fists against the keys, I'm listening.
the first was the best.
excellent stuff