some deleted user
on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike
31 Jan 2003, 7:59 AM
zounds like zitty verse to me!
Only one word is needed to describe this. Good!
Shardik, I have a coment for you. BREAK FREE! Your material is interesting, if a little metaphysical, but you base your writing too much on rules, amd so your expression gets lost. Blame your english teachers, they impressed your mind way too much.
Very nice. I go for walks through shoulder-high snowbanks. It's dark and echoey.
The sincerity of the emotion comes through really well. As a poem, it has some technical flaws, but not to any huge degree. I'm not even going to say anything blasphemous because of the religious content. Needs a little polishing, but has some shine already.
Damn fine. quality use of imagery. "Dracula sold out to the japanese" and "Atlas shrugs, I guess he's got the clap again" are mighty good. splendiferous
I know I don't have any room to talk but I don't know the "so run far and pray your feet be swift be quick witted" just Doesn't seem to fit in well.
Oh, stop whining.
Do you know, I think this may be one of the funniest poemes to be found here. Keep it up!
only if you'll buy me one of those 'silk' roses, with a 'teardrop' on them the next time you stop for diesel. sweetheart.
now, did you want the maid, or the nurse?
This one is pretty dull even for a real life occurance
while this laid it all out nicely, i would have liked to see some parody of the pimple poem in the construct of this one. i want it meaner, i want it to point fingers at the guilty, naming names, naming poems...(but leave poor Katie out of it).
I like seeing the very deformed. They amuse me.
Enter, readers at your own riske, for here there be angst. And shab-ass angst at that.
The redeeming part was the "know my pian" bit. Funniest twist ever. All this time I was reading what looked like a Serious and Heartfelt Poeme, but pian was a great satirical twist. Of course if it really is just a typo, that makes you an illiterate fucktard.
i like it, and you say i confuse you :) 10
Aww..and you even think we care about your sad sad pain of runny eyeliner...here's a zero-flavoured lollipop.
Lose the damn explaining paragraph. No one gives a damn, sweetheart.
or, for www.ratemypoo.com
don't be shy. submit.