poemwanker
on Women Fight Dirty by scitz
14 Jan 2003, 6:34 AM
This works.
oh dear......uttlerly appauling!
Very descriptive and excellent imagery. Loved the second stanza.
This rates a high mark.
Your sarcasm is great. Right on the mark with this one.
Not a pretty picture you paint but I liked this. A bit of redundancy and you might consider deleting the following:
Line 5..."back"
line 8..."all"
Line 9..."just"
Line 16..."of you"
Minor stuff but, IMO, it would read better with the above deletions. I enjoyed the read.
I've never taken a philosophy class in my life, but this is plainly incomprehensible. The language is sort of awkward.
I love black sabbath too.
But this still doesn't get a vote above 5.
Also it should say Ozzy's.
Loved it !
Hmmm, interesting poem. I am honestly at a loss as to your exact meaning and would like to hear from you before rating it. I have an idea as to intent but still not sure. I am intriged by the mood and voice of this piece. Regards....and did you receive my e-mail reply?
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
HEEHEEHEEHEEHEEHEE.
Watch out for the particles...the particles...they're gonna get ya...don't do anything stupid...
NOOO THE PARTICLES!!!!!!
also poor.....extremley poor!
what is a "tounge"? according to www.dictionary.com, the closest word is "lounge". but I guess if you are "licking" with it, perhaps it is a tongue. Even so, this "sing-song" thing here is of little merit.
Hey, great poemes! You are clearly a top philosopher! I'm sure this sputum of name-dropping limericks will prove your intellectual worldliness, even though they don't rhyme, scan, or even make much sense!
and your still and idiot....
Too mawkish in content. A bit of subtlety would help. It currently reads like a Hallmark card and the message offers nothing new. Sorry but this just doesn't work for me.
The point?
Yeah, I like this-it's very good!
I thought this was crap until I read the last line of it (the poem, not the bit at the bottom). It really hit me-I don't know why, but still I will give you a nine.