dona matter what eet ees. eees goot.

Target destroyed.

much said here.

interestiong!8

Dramatic, and the ending....cool ! *8*

Send this to the Japs it might put them off their sharkfin soup, Thanks for enlightening me in the nature of Sharks. (Thought this was about salesman) 7

Quite disturbing but an interesting perception of age. You have a certain signature to your work, most it being quite unique *9*

I was hoping for filth and got this purity ------huh ? its good though as ranger says it says a lot with so little -7-

Intelligently written, I must say the last stanza is the icing on a cake of frustration

I like this a lot, but I think you may have misclassified it as a limerick.

I have written a lot about death, and this my friend made the banshee of my soul shriek decibels hitting a few nerves along the way, you dont have to copyright work on here by the way -9-

My God! This poeme is so beautiful! 10/10!!!!!!!11

I cant find the changes.Still like it.

bah. you get a 1 for your use of that most exalted of numerals, 23, but that's all. foolish churl.

I've had the same debate on one of mine. I favour one syllable, unless you're in an industrial band or have mighty kung-fu.

ah-ha-ha! he said shit! the subversive young wit! Give 'im a 1, i says.

I rate this highly for its expressiveness and melodrama, its in the same vein as stuff tintagiles writes have an 8 well done

1st class,, the opening stanza is original in description,(at least I think so) giving this a rare 9 and a 2nd read

Yes, well done.

Deliciously disturbing 7