`splosions are good. old detective series are lots of things. 10.

You can definitely feel what you wrote. It's quite comprehensible to a general audience. Easy for people to relate yet very passionate. keep up the good work

you start me off expecting more about plaid skirts, then you talk about other stuff. Boo! Boo-urns!

been there, know it, feel it...it works quite well. like your style. To the point and honest. Passionate yet simple. Very good.

yes it is. my suggestion is to do both of them. separately or at once, your choice.

I'm gonna fist you after dinner, yeah. And fist you all night long. ah yeah Fist you till my fist is raw, oh yeah Till the break of dawn. oh ah yeah if you're going for.. you know, a lyric, sung..those changes will strengthen your choruses, or what is sort of your chorus, is more so now, don't thank me..it's my pleasure, oh yeah. <just like donkey kong> is the ps. punch line at least that's how we say it.

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ha ha EWhojoyhhyggifv. the an epilepsy attack holy shit, to fucking funny, i'll remenber this...10! this is the best worst written poem of all... YOU GET THE BIRD LEGGED HUT OF CONSTANT EMOTIONAL EMOTION WITH NO MOTION" AWARD IN AHHHH not swallowing your tongue? sure why not. 10!

lol, dude this poem is awesome. Funny as hell i have to say. Although having to deal with your cursed arse, i still think it is pretty cool.

The question here is not "is this art or pornography". The question here is just how far up that guy's ass is that baseball bat (like a cricket bat but cylindrical)

"glorious streets twilight" stuch my tongue, i was hoping for glorious street twilight holds...singular..what do you think?

Ask the 1/567 Spartan on this website...bacchus...he knows about being a hero....being a hero in the backseat of a car

Abort, retry, fail? "Therefore I shall distrusted" doesn't make sense. Typo in last line. But that's minor stuff--overall, this just doesn't do enough or show enough. What's the story, the moment, the message?

smooth. a picture painted for those who watch the waters yet relate to the vivid characterization and imagery

huh?

true

Some nice images, but I miss the punctuation.

mm...mysterious.

Also the title is too similiar to god's wife when i don't think god having a wife or jesus having a mrs. rely plays all that intersting in the psyche, because it wasn't in the good book. there's no such person..historically, but i do kind of get the mythological value and ties..it's all almost too feminine, and not about it..you know? great read a real bull. nice one..i'll come vote later. a true 9.

if there`s anything this world needs, it`s more fistiferous poemes. glee!