Not, "Do I Exist?", but "Am I Still Here?" Alternatively, "Am I Still Pissed?"

This is a narrative type poem and I enjoyed the read. Some excellent lines and written in simple and appealing language. It could be tightened a bit but overall, well done.

Somebody raped a ferret? Sorry, I don't get it.

Nice. I like the simplicity and the metaphors.

Beautiful...like a cricket bat.

This takes the piss out of Blade, which instantly guarantees it a 5, otherwise a few good images, have 6, now can I have a lollipop too?

I suggest reading, "Possessing the Secret Joy" by Alice Walker. Maybe you should try to simplify the language and not bog it down with adjectives and phrasing that make it sound like a porno poem. Of course, one of the reason for the act has a sexual purpose, and if you somehow brought that into play in a massive rewrite if make be an effective metaphor. But what you have here is a very young attempt.

[X] I checked the box. Eggselent work. 10./

Very funny. Stanza 4 (especially the last line) is excellent. 9

Funny.

Tis mighty interesting, methinks. Must've taken a minute or two to make, so I'll give ya an 8 for effort. Do you really want Lark Angel?

He is just an old bastard. Oh nevermind he is actually only 34. That's what too much pigeon watching will do to you. Don't mind him. For every 0 he gives you, let me know and I will give you a 10 to balance it out. Sometimes you can't fight the world, you just have to go with the flow and learn how to abuse it...quietly.

The Fox and The Settle A fox was walking round one day He saw a man who looked quite gay He said, "Young man, you're in fine fettle" To which the man replied "I'm Settle Settle blossomed some place in Kentucky He said to the fox "Now fuck me" But the fox was no bender He played guitar (a Fender) And so here our story will finish Its quality will not be diminished For the fox fell quite badly sick Because he bit off Settle's dick The End (of Settle's manhood)

Short and sweet. Kind of like something Ogden Nash would write. If you haven't read him, check it out.

What's the purpose of the divisions? It flows and then it just ends. I feel like I am abruptly interrupted after each stanza.

Why would i leave? oh..yes you've troubled me, somehow? What troubles me is your lack, of poetry. i am a poet My body of work outweighs your body? both. And, since i've slept, i feel much better, but you're no fun to talk too..well, it's just that well, it's because your sole is is.. is filthy, and you are an ugly poodie doodie with no headshots, too. i liked your ass though holding onto that bouncing bowl of grapefruit, woahhh. nelly, and tongue flicking those big round nipples, and putting my nose down by your cooter and going sniff sniffity do we had some good times, i was just thinking, you weren't that bad, maybe i was wrong, and hasty those eyes, clear, green, my tongue swimming in your mouth, come on one last romp.. oh yeah that message you left on my phone the other day, and one of your earliar lovie dovie ones.. ones, that i saved..i've turned into a mp3 for my website..you're going to love it. i'm calling it (granted i haven't made a commitment on the back ground music for it, but i'm thinking something sorta spice girl, cindy lauperish) "tar heeled lovers", but your voice of course is the star of the song not enough for me to be sued for mind you, i might still decide for safety precautions to transcribe it and hire a girl who sounds like you to read it and just direct her, or change the octave of your voice, and the texture more mannish, but your voice of course, or maybe just words.. you're going to love it "your like motherfucker ble blee, my phone number blah blowe, i could be rapied" it's quite a good performance perhaps your best ever..think about loving me again..please..i don't want to do this to us tanya, you know deep down in really hidden parts of my tender sole..i'll be yours forever. and i'm just lashing out for your virgin sweey hymen of nectar bye, hope you enjoy 'your' song you got your wish

I think Athena wears plaid as well....ahhhhh....what a couple! Plaid wearing sex muffins.....8

9 loved it

I like it..I don't get the low scores. Read mine about genital mutilation.

real damn close to god shit her son.