Quite brilliant. Beautifully composed

hold a rose while you may. the memory damns me.

EXPLAINED LIKE A FAIRYTALE, QUITE BEAUTIFULLY, NEEDS A LITTLE MORE SUBSTANCE I THINK.

watch out for spiders. their bites do itch.

why so unsettled? why the jags? winter smoothes, buries all in its bitter greyed skin.

Learned the art of description in this, its given me an idea for somthing =8= nice one jd

I cant do haiku sob sob, you can, envy !

And you're 100% athiest, are you?

i like it. i like the title, although if you must change it, i suggest "she said".

but this is not tailored. nor is it off the rack. this is a find. show it off.

very original, concise and to point

Dear Limness, Thank you for your reply to my comments. Thank you also for introducing "quietus" to me. I would still contend it is the wrong choice of word because while the end of relationship was a quietus for him, it was not for you in any sense of the word (there appear to be two). Hell, you are in agony for the love of him. Quietus is what you need, not what you have. Secondly my other difficulty is that the word is too obscure, save for the most erudite of readers. In a poem which is so touching and well written do you really want your readers to be scrambling for the dictionary? It breaks the spell. As to the audience you address, I find it is better to stick to one audience at a time, though having said that I am guilty myself (quite unnecessarily) in my submission Tribute to A Friend, which is written in the manner of Hilaire belloc. I am a new member of this poet's circle and I have only just submitted three poems yesterday. My others are Hattie and Party Mugging (AAgain). Please be so kind as to have a peek. Best wishes. NB You are very good.

Dear Sir or should I call you by your abbreviation "PK"? Thank you for your response to my comment. You have a great talent. The problem for you is that those who have read your work, (I read about four in the Best File) notice when you are not giving your all. Have you a collection you can send me by e-mail? I am a new member of this circle. And yesterday I submitted three poems which I would be most grateful for you to have a peek at. One is written in the romping style of Hilaire Belloc - best to be recited probably - Tribute to A friend. The other two are Hattie and Party Mugging (Again). May not be your sort of thing but please have a look. Best wishes, Nicholas

This is beautifully written. But it leans more to prose than verse. What the hell, I enjoyed it.

Dear Mr Ufanthorpey, I contend that it is only in male dreams that women are quite so carnal and horny when gazing at a stranger. But I could be wrong.

Some lovely ideas but a sonnet is a strict taskmaster. Iambic pentameter, ten beats to the line. Alternate rhymes save the concluding two lines which of course are a couplet. Yes, I know it is hard work, but when you get it right, it is perfection and it is a sonnet.

Wonderfully moving but I hope not true! Remember to revise the copy when pasting it in as a corruption process takes place - see all the ???s above. My only quibble is with some of the rhymes but then I am pedantic. Nicholas

This is very funny. You started to lose me though towards the end. And I live only half a mile from Fulham FC of which you spoke. What would our friends in the US make of your refenrences? It should be read by Richard E Grant in the manner of his brilliant performance in Withnail and I

This is not a sonnet. Sonnet has a strict format. Re categorise it

cute