I really think this is one of the funniest things I've read in a long time...definately worthy of a big fat ten!

Quite good.

Oh dear...and I used to think sooooo highly of you Blade.

Brilliant, you have dissected the sinister angst and grief that lies in the true thoughts of the smurfs with panache and a brutal simplicity. All we need now is one for the plight of smurfette.

This poeme looks like the screen of Dance Dance Revolution.

this is very good

very nice, taps into a wealth of different ideas related to bullying, with just a twist of self loathing

Fantastic for any age, but 14? Holy shit, dude...! Giving this a 10 could be construed as damning by faint praise!!!! :)

Another 10 for Miss Calvetti (surely you can write crap poems too, 'cos this ain't fair on the rest of us!!!!!!)! Nice one! :)

Damn straight! 8, and top o' the mornin' to you Paddy!

With this poem, Bachus has hit on a primal cultural archetype. "The Smurfs" was a creepy show. Their skin has a blue pallor, like corpses, or pagan celtic body paint. And the show has strong anti-semitic overtones. Gargamel, their enemy, looks like a nazi cartoon-jew. And he wants to capture the smurfs to make gold. And that cat, Azriel...Israel? hmm? And Gargamel makes the first smurfette, the one with black hair. Lilith? Gnosticism anyone? Hello!

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This is the best thing you have ever written.

"Standing there I grew baggage on my cells/ like polyps on a heavy breath." What the fuck does that mean?

Lucio Fulci that Godfather of Gore would be proud you wrote of that scene. To see what dark angels on about there is a clip on this website www.badmovie.org. Have to ten this, and Dark if we bury the hatchet over our previous bitchy argument you can bury it in my face ( As in the scene from friday 13th part 5)

Can't believe this has had shit votes, the voting on here is dody at times to say the least, well kiki your not talking bollocks, this is a deep river and i enjoyed the swim. faaaaaaacking 5 ? have an 8

Good use of repetition and all, 8

Made me think about fragility of our physical self, yet you explained phenomenon as a phenomonon and that makes this an intelligent piece - 8 -

This isn't as thought provoking and evocative as Dale, though I compare unfairly, I always find your work interesting and this is good but it needs something more. I feel this is a more emotional voyeuristic effort rather than stright from the heart. It sounds like a middle piece lacking a beginning and an end, you normally set the scene so pictorially and it was only a drag of a cuban rather than the full George Burns. Work on it, give it more oooomphhh. ( vote holded for moment )

zombie-licious.