this is a good poetry

well,i always thought it's awfull to diss others poetry but honestly i think poetry isn't ur thing,try something else

I don't know, I actually quite like the last line. Puts you succinctly into the situation.

the last stanza is way impressive

Honest. Thanks.

vey creative

A woman scorned and all that.... I remember the Game of Life board game from my younger days - it was dull, uninspiring and tired - just like this poem. 2.

Wow! A few typos, but otherwise, well, erm...wow! Spot on!!! :)

it is amazing how you could talk bad about my work when what you write has no real meaning. simple it may be but anyone can write a few line down and call it a poem.

...its not even about me and i still wet myself in fear. brilliant. i'll go change now.

so do I, shadow. However, I am an autotheist. God's wife: out of curiosity, which capt. howdy? that has been shin-bojangles' other alias since the name came to him in a dream years ago.

hey, I was expecting some batman haiku by now. Less hate, more robots. or batman.

the last line disappoints. the first 2 are setting us up...take us somewhere.

This is indeed strange. You central idea is good and some of your images work fine, and some bits seem unformed. This wax needs a bit more shaping I think. But your concept is good.

If tey're walking the narrow path of light and dark, how come they're wrapped in their own darkness forever? How does that work?

holy crucifuck, Batman! This is exactly the kind of writing that makes a good case for censorship. I hereby declare, from this day forth: No more poemes by sappy bratling 15-year-olds. So mote it be.

Well, at least the title's honest. I guess I brought it on myself to read this shash, then.0.

unusaul example

Why not?

go and die,have some mercy on me for god sake