-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on some deleted poem
27 Oct 2002, 9:48 AM
Beautiful.
this is the stupidest thing i've ever read. really.
i like the emotion of this poem. the last line doesn't sound quite right to me, though. try taking another look at it.
this reminds me of something in my life so sad, oh yeah my life
do you know something we don't??
I like the rework, I can see the picture better now. Might've been me the first time. Anyway, this is beautiful and sad.good read.8
Yeah except for any thin paper or foil. And it's garbage for non-porous materials. And it dries rigid which makes it useless for gluing materials which are under any stresses (like wood, for instance). All your needs? You must go through a lot of fucking construction paper and glitter you fucking pansy.
Great!10
You're confusion about the difference between "your" and "you're" proves that your an idiot of the First Class.
"Our life will be so joyous and fun" has to be the most hilarious line ever written in an poeme. GREAT WORK! KEEP IT UP!
good content but could use more of a rythmic feel
The hell with the ovaltine.
dont u people get it?! there has to be a winner between opponents and since he's the only opponent.. duh.. you people don't know what POETRY IS!!!! ;P ;D
a lot of thought into it, but it culd use a little structure work, but since its just basic free verse its ok
i like the general concept of it and it flows rather well
HAHAHA! Excellent.
nice observation
patient, are we? :D
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
27 Oct 2002, 6:08 PM
poetry??