and don't listen to blanche. never rely on the kindness of strangers.

nope. strike 2.

You love to speak to the select few, and I am not included.

ha! but not a poem.

'awaits the fall' is good - it makes me think if fall of man, as if something less than innocent is going on which he is too blind to see.

Jagged, endless possibilities, and WIERD to say the least. You are strange. "Everyones strange, when you're a stranger"...7 because I pulled little from it. Probably me.

Um, I disagree on the last stanza. It linked fantasy(I assume ) to reality and made a poignant statement. I liked it, just my thoughts.8

i am not sure i like the fire being self-aware, but i do like this piece.

last line makes it sound like there is just enough poverty to last all season. also, all of the "it's" should be "its". lovely imagery. nice tension. tenderness and nurishment. mmm

Something of the Prometheus myth about this - I might cut out the 'Silly fire' line and try to compress the last four lines into another three line stanza, but that's just me, I like regular forms. Your central idea is good.

A good try!

A good try!

Excellent use of 'Fred' to rhyme with 'Ted'!!!111

A good try!

Yep I think that's better - you're no longer talking down to the fire but you are urging it on its ambition.

Good! I was worried about you, scared you had'nt seen the light of day for months! HA! you're alive! It is a deep cyberworld indeed. Please do not let it suck the marrow from your being and leave you a hallowed keyboard stroker. 8 for your dead end:)

sharp shooting!

you hang with snipers? you might find good company. this is eery whiteman's talk..

I've just realised I forgot to vote on this - sorry! Here you are...

Cunningly funny