tug just ruins this. and you are easy!?

Ugh!

you said funloving, and yes being gay is a crime if you try to obey the bible

'Snowflake in the sea' isn't bad, but 'candle lit at noon' is quite hackneyed.

Change it around, fer gawd's sake: make your best friend be fear. Then write a poem about that. It could even be amusing.

Two angels in a row. What have I done to deserve this? Why does no one ever seem to meet a nasty little imp?

I'm assuming that's 'infinities, third stanza from the end line 1. His girlfriend should have a better name than mirrorgirl.

'Towards Crips, people have anger' is tripe. Tripe tripe tripe tripe tripe. Now tripe, when well-cooked with salt, pepper, and a little oregano, can be good enough. In this case, it's raw. It doesn't fit the rest -- which isn't very good either. No feeling of dilemma whatsoever. Blah.

Okay, let me see if I get this right: first two lines rhyme, 3&4 try but can only repeat the same word, and the rest give up. I strongly sugget eliminated hopes of rhyme in this affair.

Did he have wings? Wouldn't that create an inbalance while dancing? Wouldn't you be afraid of tripping on them?

The ending is bad. Perhaps he doesn't know. Perhaps your justice won't find him. And perhaps he doesn't hate anyone. It could always just be target practice. Or fun. Or something.

Office of Prayers, Cloud Seven Heaven. October 18th, 2002. Dear Silver2002: We regret to inform you that your bid to escape from self-pity has been rejected, due to the fact that you already have caved in. The evidence is, of course, contained in your posted poems. We can do nothing to help you. Regretfully, Saint Anthony, (Spokesperson for God) Office of Prayers.

She must be exceptionally light. "We talked a little" sounds like small talk, but then you express your deepest love. I would work on that line a bit. It comes off a bit awkward. And also try to remove the passive phrasing in exchange for active voice. It should help the poem move along better and keep the reader more in tune.

yeah specially if they're in the saME trailor all day drinking olympia.

Hmm, actually, the squirrel one is about the only one I don't like. This is seriously silly, which is good.

Margaret Thatcher as a rapper. That is the greatest thing done to her since they made her appear as Public Opinion in Offenbach's 'Orpheus in the Underworld'.

Ain't it the truth. Young and dumb.

yeah me too. my butler.o

'to make you feel you are the right'? 'I want nothing, just you' -- and a person is nothing? Your great love is nothing? How very flattering.

Well done. I don't get 'uncradled'. The rest is perfect. On second thought 'heavenward' seems like it might easily be replaced by something with more impact.