Tom Colebrooke
on The Limerick of Dave by worldsofwar
17 Oct 2002, 12:58 AM
Good
And you definitely get a plus for talking 16th century-like. :D
Je t'aime, meme quand tu ecris des monstriosites superficielles come celle-ci.
Some thing works here. But it is a very large circle you're drawing with it.
Maybe I'm just warmin' up.
My limited knowledge of tarot doesn't help me here, but I think she's decided to cool off her relationship with some chap? what is the significance if inverting the last card? Pleasedo explain because I think it'll clear up the poem for me - it has your usual grace and swing.
I don't know what it is - maybe it's the time of morning - but I think this is hilarious. You have a sly style and I like it. 'If ears retained'etc is genius.
Why have you resubmited this? Has it changed? I still love it.
I still love this too - what's up with the resubmissions?
What is this mad pedantry about cars/brooms whatever? Who cares? This poem would go on forever if there was a description of every single detail and by the end of it the reader would want to baste himself in his own tears of frustration and rage. Leave it as it is Razorgrin!
Lovely. But who the hell would hit you. I thought Canadians were suppose to be pacifists. Fucking hockey players.
Well done, 13 words on love and violence. An effective economy.
We should all listen to this piece. I think.
No, ya got it wrong. This IS a place where you kiss and tell.
You are melodramatic, rhyme extremely well and like shit(e). What am I to do with you? Please read my Bum's rhyme, it was for you.
I dunno, this speaks to me of a prostitutes sadness towards her predicament...? Well written, I think.
This vaguely reminds me of an opposite version of Ogden Nash's 'Adventures of Isabel' (if that's what it's called, can't quite recall). Maybe it's the bear.
Maybe he did it so you'd stop whining. Apparently it failed. I wonder what he'll find next...
the chariot? then the star. some dogs bark at nothing..why'd you repost all of these?