god'swife
on Rummage Sales by jessicazee
15 Oct 2002, 9:28 AM
Delightful.
You're on to something, here, danll; perhaps just a few word tweaks. Reminds me of John Lennon's "Julia" and "It's just the Motion" by Richard and Linda Thompson.
You're on to something, here, danll; perhaps just a few word tweaks. Reminds me of John Lennon's "Julia" and "It's just the Motion" by Richard and Linda Thompson.
Nice pun!
beautiful and spare.
Yes are good at sens eof palce, and tying it in with personal reminiscence to come up with something really resonant. Really strong.
very suggestive and neutral (in a good way)
Oh yes, this is great. pared down to the finest possible point.
You could at least have rhymed the third couplet! You have an unfortunate life. Are you still a man?
This is great. I'm really enjoying your stuff, Daniella. The fragility of these images catches at the throat.
I like the transformation imagery and the idea of life changing and the constant drive of fertility.
Very good - really rather erotic, i find, in a blitzed out way. Should 'them on the corner' be 'they'? Never mind. I love the sweat and the flesh of this.
LOL! I come in after a brief spell and you blast me with this maggot(AIDs)infected poem. Your rhyming rocks! As much as I want to give this a zero for grave generalization on your part, I'll add a 1 before the zero.
I like the progression of this from street to street - there's something very solemn about the ending, the seriousness of leisure.
I'm sorry, I don't know enough Spanish (or indeed any Spanish) and so parts of this are completely opaque to me. But then I guess it's not for me, is it Mrs God? How things have blossomed since I've been away! Oh and happy birthday P&K - I turn 29 next week.
If it reminds me of any Beatle it's George - 'Within You Without You', that kind of thing.
Rosie - this is the future. Youa re a visionary.
What is the madness? The faith or the doubt of the faith? I don't quite get this.