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on Char by Amelia
28 Sep 2002, 7:37 AM
Why Amaelea!If you have tons of poems like this get them published!9/10
right!7(you did best to defend our friend Birdman against no poets!)
Let x be this poeme. Let S be the set of all shit poemes containing pointless line breaks and other miscellaneous typographical "quirks". The intersection of {x} and S is not the empty set. Let A be the set of all poemes. Let B be the set {0, 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10}. Let MyVote be a function from A to B. ("Found Poem: Math 101", 0) is an element of MyVote.
Why did you drop the s on word? Hey now you know everyone will read it! Then you can change the title and send it to press.
minus one for the m-word, my own personal quirk
nice images! it leaves me a bit confused, though. maybe it's just me?
it's nice! the thought is honest and clear.
I've read this over and over. I love the images you give your reader. It is a dark but lovely poem. The deepest poem I have read on this sight yet.
10 and beyond!(it fits any anthology of perfect pure prancing poetry!)10!
Kewl thought snippet; makes me wanna see about 30 more lines....the promise of Promise. I'm FINALLY back to p'ranker; too much going on. My 18 yr old took off across the US and Canada by train, solo, this past week for 3 months....not that I'm worried or anything (underfuqueing statement of the year). His first stop was the Big Apple; yeah, no worries there. Write on.
Zinni - I avoided reading this one because of the title - too obvious and somewhat pedantic. I think you could lose the whole first stanza, not water down the focus; which is the ones left behind (as it always is) and not glorify the act. I can only think of Virgina Hamilton Adair's poem on her husband's suicide, "one ordinary evening" 8
I love this one. The last stanza sticks with me like "a dart to the heart" (Thank you Bruce Cockburn)
Should Mercury be capitilized in the last line? 9
Not as good as your 1st one, but still excellent. Fallow is a favorite word. Welcome.
FRASS, Thanks for the vote of confidence.My inferiority complex got the better of me last night.Can't wait for sun6p! I'm trying to (hang). Maybe trying too hard. Another glitch. Time, time is on my side.......
"and feeling stronger" sets a speed bump for me. Otherwise Its been a long time since I've looked at a mannequin that way . Loved "upskirting" the stiff broads.8
Isn't it just the World Bank?
it dropped the 's' at the end again, mrs.g. throw a couple of line endings on, for good measure,that might stop it.