Tibbs
on The Nights Draw In by Nicholas Jones
25 Sep 2002, 11:48 PM
Great. Really great evocation.
Unfinished sentences; missing punctuation and capitalisation; the bubonic plague?
Prankster or no, he's a fascinating protagonist, in this story too. When do the others get to speak?
Bald is a four letter word. Here's a 4 to go with it.
My goldfish grew an inch.
Good sounds here, but meter is uneven.
20 oz. ought to do it nicely. Nicely done.
DO you like math? I could help you gather up the bees from the shore.
This poem makes me want to go out and buy a 40-Oz. Make that 2. Works every time.
Why do you punctuate like that?
By the way dear Dr., there's a terrific website, www.todotango.com. I think you'd like it. They have a link to a few Argentine radio stations, the best of them being Radio Criolla. Play it and think of me. Sweet dreams, Caio.
Beautiful. And full of that awful hollowness of loss. But should it be Paris in the last line?
Highly comic and no doubt true.
I like your poem. Speaking of mail, how would you like to receive a subscription to your favorite magazine? I'm selling them as a fund raiser for my school I need one more subscription by tommorrow to win a really big prize. what do you say? S.O.g
Because you'd rather cling to something imagined than move on and make a future? Really people. Is this the bleeding hearts club?
Sleep shall neither night nor day
hang upon his penthouse lid;
he shall live a man forbid.
iknow
A proper synaesthetic riff - great rhythms
Silly bird. Smart poem.