jlanza
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2002, 6:32 PM
Hmm, I think you tried to pass this poem off as your own on another site as well, do you really have no talent of your own?
I like your poetry, Christof. Not sure I understand 'unknown dully', though. How about 'as a moth's wing'? I think of a butterfly's wing as being colourful, not mottled. I reread your poems, dood.
Impaired, if couples could have relationships like this, there'd be no divorce.
Damn. This is good. I do not like this line:
Reaching through murky depths of life, alone.
And I think there is a typo - surface for surgace, but good stuff. When are you going to post something new? Ah yes, young and spry out gathering experience. I need something new lemonade.
I am so happy that our small conflict has resulted in my discovering your poems. I especially love "Niether thought grows wings/Nor passion catches fire" And the fact that we both used the image of eyes as springs of purifing water also makes me glad.
After reading many poems here on this site, along with some downright nasty comments left by readers such as poetandknowit, et al. It was refreshing to read some of your comments, godswife. You always provided constructive criticism, while remaining polite and friendly. So, I just had to read some of your writing. While I must admit that I don't think I completely "get" a lot of your work, I can nevertheless recognize that the auther has obvious talent. Anyway, just wanted to say hi and thanks!
That vote of one was just wrong. I enjoyed it.
Haha. Cute.
Me again. I really enjoy your writing. Profound yet humorous all at once.
Brutal. But good.
Welcome to the new millenium. i think it's well constructed except for line 2. Doesn't take much away but it wouldn't be hard to tidy.
very good, i really enjoyed reading it.
i really liked you poem. it is very powerful and meaningful. keep up the great work
i feel for the person you wrote this for but i guess they deserved it.
maybe being unable to hear let him understand the unspoken ( or rather , respoken ) gestures more carefully. Thus, being even more aware of what was going on behind his back (in front of his face). Hmmm...just maybe.
where's the "dark and depressing" part. I have seemed to have missed it. All is well. Behave! Behave!
Did i meet you last night?
Call me a stick in the mud. Maybe if it was well writen I could forgive it's crassness. But it's not, it's just extremely childish. This is the last time I'll bother commenting on one of the many pieces of "litter" on this site. I am wasting my time. No vote.
Yes, GW, this is the product of a pure soul and a sensitive heart full of genuine care and consideration. So tenderly you reconstruct a religious theme to make it universal in its uniqueness and unique in its horizons and come out with a positive optimistic conclusion. Yes poetry can convey hope and will to resurrect. At least you have done so in this poem. I also do believe in the resurrectionist power of love, the only energy enabling one to continue inspite of all odds. Please read my poem cul-de-sac and its conclusion.