Are you still in high school? Do you wear too much eyeliner? If not, then I'm fresh out of explanations for your work.

well rendered!

Goddamn terrific, this is. Leos make me insane and violent.

I think my girlfriend's a Leo and we get on alright. I'm a Scorpio. So what does that mean? Someone enlighten me!

sounds like you two really have a nice thing going there.

I say nice things about poems that aren't crap. When they are crap, I say so. This is a bad poem. Really bad.

OK, but that background is not clear from the poem itself. But don't get me wrong - I think the dignity of the piece comes over loud and clear.

You should patent it- 10/10

by the same token, you know nothing about me, but i did deserve that smart-ass comeback. i've been in a pissy mood latley, and instead of just saying, 'this poem is, in my opinion, unoriginal and boring' i stabbed at your name. i sincerely apologize. my bad. but the poem does suck, regardless of my attitude.

They've already confessed their love to the person. They just have no intention to pursue any kind of a relationship, because it is known to be unfeasable. The rejection has already been dealt with. The idea behind it is that the one who is desired should not be afraid of the fact that they are loved by the narrator, because the love just stands as it is...dignified, existing, but non possessive.

bella donna--when you use someone else's words, it's customary to give them credit. i'm pretty sure mr. cornell wrote 'seasons', containing the words 'If I should be short on words/ And long on things to say/ Could you crawl into my world/ And take me worlds away?'

best story I've read in a while. I wiggle my leg before the genius that is -=Dark_Angel=-. Truly sir, you are the king of kings.

A rather interesting sideways view of multicultural society and how several peoples can be integrated whilst still alienating others - a very moving piece. 8/10. I will follow your work, He Who Has No Mercy.

i like the imagery and ideas expressed, but feel like it would sing with a little editing. work on the last 2 lines a little more? they are not strong enough to close what you have opened.

with that information, i like it much more. i wonder if the idea of telepathy needs to be made clearer, so that the poem is more accessible? perhaps i am too dense.

i understood. i understand with every fibre. why are people threatened by a love like this? can love ever be wrong? i think, no. i think that actions can be misguided and selfish at times, or, they can be the opposite. but a love such as this, feeling that ethereal rope which connects your heart to his, regardless of all else, is pure. other things in life may prevent you from wrapping yourselves in each other; it is that way often enough. and to live with the dignity of loving from afar without soiling your own heart, that is heroic. thank you kthulah.

I like the argument of this - it is very sonnet-like, and so is the 14-line form although you've not gone for a rhyme scheme. I'm not sure the final couplet convinces though - plainly the narrator doesn't love this person more than their dignity, rather, they are afraid of rejection I would think. After all, it is easier to love from afar than to test your love on the 'front line'.

brilliant.

This is great. May the birds always be sleeping.

If he doesn't do these things , he is a cad and a bounder. I'm sure he could be persuaded.