Its nice to explore

and i dont think my poetry is good enough for prime time i know that alot of my poems arent good im just saying that guys opinion was shit

--oh, the poem--i don't get the transition from description to conflict. i see there's inherent unrest, but i think that you have become more adept at the weave and wake since 6/99. thanks for the explanation of the scenario. broken dreams clutter the curbside; unworn wishes piled in the attic like so many christmas sweaters are more haunting than the ghosts of the past. future perfect never was. tense. as for the beer, sierra nevdada started the evening. down to coors light and a very old scotch ale, which it's about 80 degrees too hot too drink tonight, but i mat have to bite the bullit, and take one for the team. still no muse. damned if i haven't drained every can and bottle looking for her, though. as far as the pros and cons of arguing, yep, i know. i was married for 5 years, and we came to a fork in the road. thanks a lot, robert frost. we both took a 50% best travelled road. no arguing about the path at all, just, see ya. salty indeed. beer foam salt. what kinda red red you nosing tonight?

I like this just because it is so far from anything I could attempt. Wild change of rhythms, offbeat pauses, funky style. It reminds me of this publisher/poet I once knew and for the life of me cannot remember the name. If I find his books around the house, I will mention him, because I think you would like him. He is all over the place and snubs just about every convention. A bit like this and some of the other work I have read of yours. As far as the poem, I like the concrete images I can piece together (i.e. opening and ending), but the middle loses me with the rambling. But I have a bit of a traditionalist background, so really what do I know.

I'm really having trouble putting the images together. got the first one. got the second. don't get the third tying in, really. maybe if I knew the latin? record makes death? hmm. now I'm curious enough to look it up. :) recollection workman death. something like. hmm. ooh -- the workman died but comes back to life to turn off the lathe? sorry, really too obscure for me.

Are you inspired by Wordsworth's immortal lines: I've measured it from side to side 'Tis two feet long and three feet wide By any chance?

Fairly easy on the eye, however please do beware - Westlife may cover this before long.

if you hate my poetry so be it i told you i dont care i only do these for fun and yes it is nice when someone praises your poetry its not exactly the most important thing in the world,............ surfing is!

"In the beginning was the Word, and the Word was with God, and the Word was God. The same was in the beginning with God". I'll thank you to think about THAT the next time you write about The Word! Good day to you, Sir!

wonderful, moon, lover. backroads of her body. wonderful. you have taken me there.

Where is Gollancz when you need him? I wonder whom he would nab today to write the LBC mantra? Are there any good propagandists anymore? Anywho, this works well revealing the LBC from the grunt level revealing the dogmatic good intentions (or deceptive intentions if you consider the poems undertones to violence) along with many in the group's extreme naivete. Interesting subject matter, but I do not like the fuck-up in the first line. It seems out of place? And some of the lines trip in the prose.

Maybe a full line break after laughter would slow this down a bit and let it build more slowly.

I have never seen such misuse of the ellipsoidal in my life. It is rampant on this site. Who is teaching you people. But in this case it was good because I faded out in the first sentence and didn't have to read the journal entry that followed. Think before you write.

Archaic ideas breeds bit of archaic language. Maybe try to take this and create your own style.

This is emotional drool, not poetry. The raging hormones of adolescence belong in the locked diary away from mommy's eyes.

I like the imagery, the choice of nouns. I'm curious what the inspiration for it was?

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Pottymouth!!!!!!!!!

some very pleasing imagery, but there's a fable in here, and it wants to out. let it.

This is just not very good. I wish I had some suggestions to make it better, but I cannot think of one.