Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.72.6.133	10-Mar-05/12:09 PM
Why didn't you cahnge "it's" to "its" on this edit? It's been pointed out before. "forge you a sword" - don't get the connection. Otherwise good.
Re: The Snow Globe by Caducus	edpeterson 68.79.52.31	10-Mar-05/10:46 AM
how about "borne on her tears? " I would remove 'weeping' from the last stanza, maybe more. there is a power to this. I like it a lot.
Re: Subtle Reasons by crooked_smile	Rainbow_chaser 65.95.224.97	10-Mar-05/11:24 AM
great poem, perhaps i dont agree with the no straight answer part, but thats just diffence in opinion or belief. but over all im lovin this poem! 9 ~Autumn
Re: Evening by Enkidu	Dovina 12.72.6.133	10-Mar-05/11:59 AM
"life's" seems unneeded, and "nightly" seems not often enough for most catastrophes.
Re: A Dance by D. $ Fontera	Dovina 12.72.6.133	10-Mar-05/12:01 PM
Seems silly. What on earth do you mean?
Re: Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	10-Mar-05/12:08 PM
Eats shoots leaves
Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT	crystal4 65.32.226.123	10-Mar-05/1:10 PM
this is very good because it says what the person is thinking.
Re: Alone by frdup717	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:13 PM
i like this - but i must say i disagree the answers are never in any one else but yourself, and if you are not finding them then you may not be ready to know - but i don't think, even though we would all like to believe otherwise, that the answers can be found in any other person -megan
Re: Harvester of Sorrow by frdup717	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:14 PM
nice - i like this alot - -megan
Re: Resurrection by Dreammaker1024	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:22 PM
i like this but it is a bit too much all at once i think that the concrete block of words may make people less likely to read it - perhaps if you broke if up into verses or stanzas regardless it was good - megan
Re: The Artist by Dreammaker1024	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:28 PM
i really really like this you tell it well -megan p.s. - you are here because you obviously like to wright poetry - so i ask you this why not put her name in the books and the learned memory of those around the world?
Re: Painting by RION12	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:31 PM
i like this - it actually reminds me of something i wrote - in fact the theme is very similar (perhaps great minds think alike?) :) you could make it a little bit better if you sharped some of the edges and played with your word choice, but it is overall very nicely done - 9 - -megan
Re: Good-Bye by RION12	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:33 PM
not your best work by far - i think that if this was sung and hade a really creative tune it would work but as simple words it seems slightly lacking - 8 - -megan
Re: Love by RION12	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:34 PM
it is nice - i like this - but as others have posted before - i think that this is one of lifes unanswered questions - -megan
Re: Memories by RION12	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:35 PM
seems a too have a touch of fruedian psychology - i like it -megan
regarding some deleted poem...	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:42 PM
i absolutely love this - 10! -megan
regarding some deleted poem...	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:43 PM
i like this - its not your strongest work by far - and your ending is weak - but you bring up good points - 8 - -megan
regarding some deleted poem...	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:45 PM
i enjoy this, and if flows very nicely, though the what exactly it is all about if somewhat foggy to me -megan
regarding some deleted poem...	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:50 PM
i absolutely love this it is superb, you right it so well and your theme with the newsman was very nice -megan
regarding some deleted poem...	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	10-Mar-05/1:54 PM
i really like all of your work it is written so well, you seem to be an original voice among a sea of overused cliches -kudos -megan