Re: We Have Nothing to Talk About by jessicazee	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-05/6:35 AM
Gritty.
Re: I'm Aboard by Ali_cat018	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-05/6:36 AM
Filth
Re: spiders and butterflies by Mona Lisa	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-05/6:36 AM
Very dull
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-05/6:31 AM
Several blind monkeys randomly choosing words from a revolving wheel upon which words had been arbitrarily arrayed would probably blanch if they ever managed to choose such confused dross as "Now watched me dangling as I struggled to breathe". You smelly virgin.
Re: For Junior by PodPoet	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	1-Mar-05/11:54 PM
Love/Above List http://jowls.org/cgi-bin/wiki/wiki.pl?Poemeranker/Love-Above_List Prayer of life (Other) by njuGold In weakness, in suffering, and mercy to love More spiritually, more gracefully as below and much as above Was it Me?? (Free verse) by ga_writer You were my angel sent from above, Sent here for me to shower you with my love. Angel (Free verse) by Butterfly1120 She to me is an angel. One sent from up above. Here to give, and not recieve, someone with so much love. The meaning of Love (Free verse) by The Slender Blade What is this? An angel in heaven? No, this is love, From the skies above. Child of my Buttocks (Lyric) by -=Dark_Angel=- For Jesu's legendary scorn Is pitiful, and flawed by Love. The greatest anguish from Above Song For My Soulmate (Lyric) by John K Have you ever seen to people madly in love? They've been given a gift from their God above. Forbidden Love (Ode) by crystal lane swift I know He is watching from above, Is our moment all a dream? Why must this be a forbidden love? Am I Good Enough? (Free verse) by crystal lane swift I want nothing more than for you to return my love. I write pretty lines for you about the heavens above. An Angel (Lyric) by broken_wing11 An angel walked thru the gates today Into His heavens up above An angel has been blessed She left us with her love A.E.G. (Free verse) by nowhereman How can you say you feel no love for me, I hold you so high above Goodbye (Free verse) by Sunshine Conkey Maybe someday he'll find true love Just know "sunshine" will be watching from above. Sent from Above (Free verse) by Sugarbbybuttrfly Time passed and we spoke move and soon we fell in love And in my heart I knew it was true this love was from above Essential Love (Other) by CharismaAllOver when God made you, God made love from high in heaven high above. Good Love (Free verse) by w~* ATHENA *~w what makes a good love does it come from above I Love You (Free verse) by babyBOOMER I Will Never Compromise My Love Yet Dreaming Takes Me Far Away Of a Woman Lying above lost love (Free verse) by cherish My head aches from heartaches of my lost love. Also in hopes of one day being together one day up above. Love (Sonnet) by simone_girard I do believe the lord above Created you for me to love Symbol Of Love (Sonnet) by simone_girard So they say goodbye to their symbol of love As their baby moves on to god above You Give Me Love (Free verse) by Free2Rhyme15 The brightest star shinning, in the sky above Is nothing to you the person who gives me love. love 2 (Free verse) by little_angel_maria as i've failed in all of the above, I admit by chance maybe i just fell in love Tragic Love (Sonnet) by WithoutLife A heart that can never be given away To the one I truly love, Must forever wonder astray Was it condemned from above? It's All 'Cause I Love You (Free verse) by Tigger8023 You're the perfect star in the sky above, The one I wish upon with all my love. My One True Love (Lyric) by Hooman We'll reach out to the mystery above, For we have the blessing of our fate, As you are my one and only true love. My Guardian Angel (Limerick) by ramtheman1 I know my mom's in the heavens above, Watching over us all with lots of love. My Angel (Free verse) by baby_d You have proved to be an angel, Sent from heaven above. To bring back to me, The faith I had lost in Love. The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') (Pimple) by scitz I have fell deep in love, She’s an Angel from the sky above. LIKE AN ANGEL (Free verse) by jeremy bjelland She has lots of love, Just like an angel from above. Angel (Lyric) by mistaric You’re an angel, Sent from up above You’re an angel, You’re the one I love Little Fly (Other) by PodPoet Spread the germ known as love Sent from somewhere up above For Junior (Other) by PodPoet Rainbow spreading above As loneliness becomes love
Re: The Artist by Dreammaker1024	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	2-Mar-05/12:48 AM
By all accounts, Black mothers are ace. The same cannot be said of Black fathers, who seem to get a lot of bad press. "The majority of African American children live in homes without their fathers." Similar parps ring true in the Afro Carribean community in Britain. Three questions pull down their trousers and vault out of all this muss: Who is responsible? What can be done about it? And who on Earth is going to put it into action?
Re: Don't Ask, Don't Tell by PodPoet	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	2-Mar-05/3:39 AM
Is gayness a systemic problem in the Marines? Or are they merely blighted by a few bad eggs? The omelette that is homosexualism is rotten indeed, and like all rotten omelettes it spreads, planting new omelette seeds wherever its omelette legs may carry it. Make no mistake: omelettism is more than just a pertinent analogy, it's a fact of life. All that's left is for us to ask ourselves, "How do we stamp out a breeding omelette?" Simple. We place it in the middle of The Bible, and slam the book shut. Case closed. Omelette absorbed. -10-
Re: Advertising says: by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.188	2-Mar-05/8:44 AM
You are at your best when you do the math. The feeling I get from this poem is “Ennui and TV.”
Re: spiders and butterflies by Mona Lisa	Dreammaker1024 198.146.102.83	2-Mar-05/9:25 AM
Interesting view.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	2-Mar-05/3:15 PM
A Parliment Of Shit.
Re: Advertising says: by Dovina	Bachus 24.130.62.63	2-Mar-05/3:17 PM
Contrived crap
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	nentwined 64.60.192.130	2-Mar-05/4:24 PM
This is a lot of fun.
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	2-Mar-05/5:49 PM
..."in the paddleboat of our endless love"
Re: Advertising says: by Dovina	richa 81.178.250.129	2-Mar-05/11:39 AM
Eat healthfully? If you really believe advertising is some great contradiction because some people want you to spent your money on their tat and not someone else's but that someone else wants the opposite then I would at least suggest portraying these people asking you to be fat or to 'eat healthfully'. And what is the spacing all about, 44 words on 31 lines!
Re: The Path by hummers86	DevilBuni 149.152.192.18	2-Mar-05/7:01 PM
stanza 4 is a little off tempo and some of the rhymes feel forced - like life and stride and made and aid. But overall, I enjoyed it. :)
Re: My Fair Maiden! by Sashaclese	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-Mar-05/6:32 AM
Awful.
Re: We Have Nothing to Talk About by jessicazee	Dovina 12.72.4.218	3-Mar-05/6:57 AM
Good. I think you could make it stronger by cutting a few words - "trance" - 3 adjectives in a row. And a line break after "secrets." "so" in line 7
Re: A Time by DevilBuni	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	3-Mar-05/12:16 AM
A very common sentiment expressed -- very -- tritely. Considering that you're working with a sentiment most have experienced to some degree, your primary concern is not in endowing the reader with an understanding of it, but rather in the poeticizing of it. If you want to continue writing poetry, I suggest you experiment with the potential of poetic language: for instance, as an exercise, you might try writing this poem several different ways, each time using different imagery and metaphors. At the same time, however, retain the clearness of expression that you already seem to possess; as it stands, your poetry is more like banal prose. Avoid trite phraseology or word choices like: "once there was a time", "happy", "smile", "cry more than smile", "sorrow I feel is strong", "stranger", "nowhere to belong", "I wish", "sang me that song", "I'm empty", etc. Let your language off its leash! The opposite of banality is novelty, so seek to be novel -- but be sure to still communicate clearly. Then you will make progress.
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	jessicazee 205.188.116.135	3-Mar-05/1:06 AM
Scrap the first stanza, albeit with my fair regards- the rest I be liking. 8.9
regarding some deleted poem...	jessicazee 205.188.116.135	3-Mar-05/1:11 AM
Line 3 is too wordy - still I think this has potential - also, consider omitting the "inspired by" addition - it just takes away from your creation. we're all inspired by things - that's what the definition of "poet" is. Let your poem reflect that inspiration, with hopes it inspires another.