Re: Life by AmberDawn	SupremeDreamer 216.99.240.156	1-Feb-05/4:48 PM
Ambitious, but ultimately found lacking. Take smaller bites, little dabs of mustard, and eventually the sandwhich becomes whole. (If that makes any sense... *shrug*) Blessed with three.
Re: Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	Dovina 12.72.3.142	1-Feb-05/8:54 PM
Doesn't make sense.
Re: Ode to Brittanyy and her Dyke Jacket. by DreamerSupreme	Dovina 12.72.3.142	1-Feb-05/8:53 PM
That's not nice!
Re: Life by AmberDawn	wilco 24.165.207.93	1-Feb-05/4:54 PM
Being as this is the second poem I've read today called "Life", I can't, just can't. First, you need to learn to proofread, or at least you spellcheck. Then, try writing about something else. All this positivity is a bad thing to be posting here. If you're going to be positive, at least mask it. ;) On the plus side, you have a great chance of making it onto -=D_A=-'s Love/Above Liste. Congrats.
Re: Life by AmberDawn	sliver 198.81.26.47	2-Feb-05/8:34 AM
Some misspelling, Your metre is off also. Just a word or two omitted or added in places may help some.While I admit compromise does often help, there are times when you absolutely cannot give on an issue.
Re: James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom	some deleted user 69.61.175.227	1-Feb-05/9:48 PM
This is the most perfect discription of my life I have ever read. Wow.
Re: A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.11.12	1-Feb-05/9:56 PM
Do you consider yourself a feminist? I say again, this isn't bad. But questionably feminist, if that.
Re: My Heroes by MacFrantic	zodiac 212.118.11.12	1-Feb-05/9:58 PM
Were your heroes cows? Yes, they have.
Re: A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	zodiac 212.118.11.12	1-Feb-05/10:00 PM
The apples took me by surprise. Don't know why.
Re: Baghdad Election by Mona Lisa	Stephen Robins 82.211.67.131	2-Feb-05/3:31 AM
Utter hogwash.
Re: Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	Stephen Robins 82.211.67.131	2-Feb-05/3:51 AM
Nonsense.
Re: No more goodbye by ShaNoN+960317485	ShaNoN+960317485 199.40.206.3	2-Feb-05/4:52 AM
Its been a while but hope you guys are doing fine - Cheers ShaNoN
Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	wilco 24.165.207.93	1-Feb-05/4:39 PM
I'm not going to be picky about changing a couple of words and not repeating theline exactly. It's really one of your best. I wish you'd spend a little more time writing and a little less time drying to be -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I., Jr., but it's ok.
Re: Ode to Brittanyy and her Dyke Jacket. by DreamerSupreme	wilco 24.165.207.93	1-Feb-05/4:42 PM
I'm not going to vote on this because it's just plain fuckin' mean. All that aside, though, it's pretty good. hehe
Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	fevriere 62.254.128.4	2-Feb-05/8:25 AM
Simple, pleasing.
Re: Ode to a Friend by tadpole	sliver 198.81.26.47	2-Feb-05/8:29 AM
Must be a terrible thirst!
Re: James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom	fevriere 62.254.128.4	2-Feb-05/8:37 AM
The first two lines were a hook for rhyme-loving girls like self. What are golden heels about? I do like it, even the gentle shortening of the line lengths is very effective but I can't help thinking if you played around with it more, it might flow - moments like reflection/perception don't seem to be exceptions but more highlights. What do you think; do you want it to rhyme? No vote yet because I don't believe it's finished.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 198.81.26.47	2-Feb-05/8:43 AM
I guess you're learning that the people here don't like this kind of stuff. Hoping the title will shield you?
Re: A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	sliver 198.81.26.47	2-Feb-05/8:45 AM
Enjoyable reading
Re: Old Friends by sliver	Brittanyy 152.163.100.135	2-Feb-05/9:00 AM
I really like this poem and anyone who says anything bad about it is just jealous because none of their stuff is as good.