regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 209.247.222.115	20-Jan-05/11:04 AM
If you mean a blind person, then the beginning is good. But the conclusion eludes me, since we must see or feel or hear the beautiful thing before we can know its beauty.
Re: Half a dozen by thepinkbunnyofdoom	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Jan-05/5:30 PM
I think it's pretty good, but I'd use out of instead of outta.
Re: Blue Executioner by Caducus	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Jan-05/5:31 PM
well done
Re: Enlightenment by Dovina	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Jan-05/5:34 PM
in an age of...much better than your last, D.
Re: The Snow Globe by Caducus	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Jan-05/5:36 PM
beautifully written, although sad.
Re: black dog by wilco	nentwined 64.81.38.95	20-Jan-05/7:40 PM
lamplight's glow ;) definitely a lot of interesting imagery here, though you've lost me with what's going on. someone suggests murder, and I suppose I could see that--but not enough. "black dog" makes me think (of a friend, firstly, but after that) maybe--a hit and run... or a car crash (oil slick, and chasing shadows). Well, the words give me a car crash, the dog makes me think hit and run. Can you tell I'm really, really lost? I'd like a few more crumbs of detail to piece the puzzle together.
Re: Playfight by fevriere	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Jan-05/7:40 PM
I guess you just finished reading some Shakespeare?
Re: The Flower by Bhaskaryya	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Jan-05/8:05 PM
More showing and less telling. You could say all this much more beautifully with fewer words and a little more specific.
Re: Enlightenment by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	21-Jan-05/4:34 AM
Nonsense, the dawn of reason has never been less likely in the U.S.: your President is a religious fanatic and your country is inhabited by moronic zealots. CNBC and Fox news fill your minds up with tripe and as a consequence there is no country in the world as close minded and addicted to a misconceived notion of freedom. No doubt Thomas Jefferson would be happy to see how the dawn of reason had broken across an obese landscape to reveal a country full of be-mulletted half wits travelling from one dispensary of sugary confection to another whilst becrying the joy of living in a land where freedom of thought extends to which Krispy Kreme donught they will fill their fat mouths with next.
Re: black dog by wilco	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.178	21-Jan-05/8:44 AM
Of course it sounds like it's about doggie roadkill but even if it isn't...-10- Good.
Re: life by -=??lilaznjen??=-	dancin_n_da_moonlite 66.28.32.66	21-Jan-05/9:40 AM
um.........not the best work for sure... -mega
Re: His Master's Jodhpurs by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	dancin_n_da_moonlite 66.28.32.66	21-Jan-05/9:44 AM
um.....okay then.......kind of .........odd.......i think (6) -mega
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	21-Jan-05/9:51 AM
Can't even be bothered to read it.
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	21-Jan-05/9:52 AM
May I be the second to congratulate you on the depth of your failure and the nonsensical desperation of your attempts to rhyme.
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	21-Jan-05/10:01 AM
Ten fingers make you retch When I ram them down your throat. Ten fingers really stretch The anus of a stoat. Ten fingers claw and scratch Your baby's screaming face. Ten fingers fist your snatch With style and class and grace.
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	21-Jan-05/10:02 AM
Utterly, utterly sordid and shameful.
Re: black dog by wilco	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	21-Jan-05/10:03 AM
Awfully good/bad.
Re: Three In a Room by Sam	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	21-Jan-05/10:04 AM
Don't be gay Join the Army
regarding some deleted poem...	LintyWeenis 63.147.240.11	21-Jan-05/10:36 AM
Mr. Garcia Black, I've said it before and I'll say it again, I supremely enjoy your stuff. My self-confidence is on an all time high. Thank you,sir.
Re: Depression by stacylynn_3	dancin_n_da_moonlite 64.12.116.135	21-Jan-05/12:57 PM
very nice............... -mega