| Re: Moses by Dovina |
patty t 64.231.7.229 |
18-Nov-04/1:28 PM |
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but he never got to see the promised land
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Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:29 AM |
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Is there any particular reason for the religious nature of your recent poems, or do you just find it a nice subject to write about?
Anyway, like it lots, have another 10.
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arduinn 165.21.83.240 |
17-Nov-04/6:15 PM |
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neat.. but don't quite like the picture of the girl formed in my mind. she sounded so.. helpless. was that what you were trying to convey? i mean.. she couldn't live without the guy kinda thing?
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| Re: You Were a Jerk to me in my Dream Last Night by T. Jonathron Remp |
MacFrantic 64.12.116.67 |
17-Nov-04/6:28 PM |
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senseless and wonderful *7*
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electroman1979 64.12.116.67 |
17-Nov-04/9:22 PM |
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great poem, although i doubt many who read will understand or appreciate. -10-
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Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:30 AM |
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Puts me in mind of the Lightning Seeds: Sugar Coated Iceberg, can't think why.
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| Re: Mice by MacFrantic |
Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:33 AM |
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Here's an alternate ending:
This dubious poem is not that great,
I think I'll go and masturbate.
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| Re: You Were a Jerk to me in my Dream Last Night by T. Jonathron Remp |
Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:34 AM |
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I like this. I don't have to try and find any meaning in it and it's completely random.
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Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:36 AM |
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Where do all the egotistical people come into this.
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Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:37 AM |
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I came.
I saw.
I decided not to bother reading it.
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| Re: Last dance at the lake by Caducus |
Bobjim 143.167.177.1 |
18-Nov-04/7:39 AM |
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| Re: can't you tell me? by hendrimike |
leonxic 80.205.204.85 |
18-Nov-04/9:31 AM |
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My guess: A horrible attempt at a song. Don't do it again.
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leonxic 80.205.204.85 |
18-Nov-04/9:34 AM |
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No one will ever eat your beauty? What the hell. I know what you are getting at, but this is just crap.
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| Re: Poems for devolution by richa |
Dovina 209.77.30.198 |
18-Nov-04/12:53 PM |
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You've moved it to spring for the farmers and given us Rhyl in place of the former euphamism. I don't see the devolution as clearly now.
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| Re: Why Me by blacksoul |
Dovina 209.77.30.198 |
18-Nov-04/1:33 PM |
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You need to look at spelling and grammar.
Is jroday really your father, and is he really dying? Tell him I hope he's not dying.
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Dovina 209.77.30.198 |
18-Nov-04/1:39 PM |
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Using "your" for a general granny in this sense seems distracting. Why not say "my granny" or just "granny?" And "total moron" doesn't set right either. Maybe something about her attitude.
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| Re: Can Predictions Be Proven? by peaceseeker |
Dovina 209.77.30.198 |
18-Nov-04/1:45 PM |
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Wings are not invincible.
Dissonance has to do with sounds.
Other vaguenesses follow.
It's a good image but lacks clarity.
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Dovina 209.77.30.198 |
18-Nov-04/1:48 PM |
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How can anything shake an earthquake?
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edpeterson 68.79.22.23 |
18-Nov-04/4:43 PM |
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electroman1979 64.12.116.67 |
18-Nov-04/7:12 PM |
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all men are not created equal, and God is just in what He does
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