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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/3:55 PM |
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i so totally kno what u mean....i check for snow every single school morning....pitiful i kno
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/3:58 PM |
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another good idea for a poem bratsy!
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edpeterson 68.79.20.59 |
29-Oct-04/4:20 PM |
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| Re: I WILL SURVIVE by massangel62 |
edpeterson 68.79.20.59 |
29-Oct-04/4:25 PM |
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| Re: I Don't Care by ForgottenSoul17 |
edpeterson 68.79.20.59 |
29-Oct-04/4:27 PM |
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a floppy, shaven walrus clit
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edpeterson 68.79.20.59 |
29-Oct-04/4:38 PM |
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a dumpling, surrounded by a moat of the brownest gravy.
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| Re: From Womb To Wood by Caducus |
Imago 64.8.78.190 |
29-Oct-04/12:35 PM |
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Great images. Good conclusion. The last stanza breaks up a little but the last 3 lines redeem it. 9
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| Re: Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago |
Imago 64.8.78.190 |
29-Oct-04/2:06 PM |
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Like this?
call upon the wrath of god
for the sword he yields is truth
and through his word procure
A spot of holy ground
and the seed you sow may grow and bloom
into something that is pure
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| Re: Beachy head by Mr Pig |
INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67 |
29-Oct-04/2:38 PM |
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This defies standard suicidal parameters. Particularly the -many footpritnts. I think I've heard skin of water somewhere. Um, Blend the first stanza, 'liminate
the -but-. I honestly don't know the first thing about using line breaks, but for some reason I don't like the way this is laid out.
Glad to see you stopped by.
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/3:46 PM |
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Good one bratsy! it's an awesome reminder!
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/3:49 PM |
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nice one bratsy...provokes alot more feeling than the one i wrote about my mother!
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/3:52 PM |
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you come up with such awesome ideas to write about!
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/3:53 PM |
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i certainly hope that never happens....daunting poem...i like it....
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| Re: Now you're inside my heart by elizabethann |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.20.71 |
29-Oct-04/4:48 PM |
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Much like the unsavoury whoosh emitted when one inserts one's foot into a wellington.
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| Re: This path by midnitebeauty101 |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.20.71 |
29-Oct-04/4:52 PM |
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Yes; the walk to the outhouse can be a terrible, lonely thing. Especially when you know you're going to do a whopper turd.
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cuddlytiger17 209.105.159.145 |
29-Oct-04/5:17 PM |
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This is a really good poem. I'm not religious, but faith is something that everyone can relate to, no matter their beliefs. The rhymes and flow of the poem are astounding. *claps*
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| Re: Social Awarness by midnitebeauty101 |
cuddlytiger17 209.105.159.145 |
29-Oct-04/5:21 PM |
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Sad write.
You spelled "awareness" wrong in your title, and I believe you meant "of" not "if" in the third stanza.
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| Re: Secada (Parody of sasha's lying vagina) by Bachus |
edpeterson 68.79.20.59 |
29-Oct-04/5:43 PM |
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asshole. nigger. stupid sonovabitch. Idiot. imbecile. mammoth.
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/7:04 PM |
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thats a hard subject to express well in a poem....GOOD JOB...
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thisismyusername 64.136.27.225 |
29-Oct-04/7:08 PM |
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very very nice......been there...doing that
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