Re: Feast On Me by cuddlytiger17	zodiac 212.118.14.17	11-Oct-04/5:32 AM
Honest question of the day: Is a target - presumably a shooting target - really ever intended as a shield? By whom?
Re: For Beth, after anal intercourse by zodiac	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.16.109	11-Oct-04/5:40 AM
Sometimes you produce the most awful bungling bogstanton.
Re: Feast On Me by cuddlytiger17	Rollsoftoiletpaper 152.163.101.9	10-Oct-04/7:53 AM
What is a "pimple" anyways? I mean, what makes it different from free verse, etc.?
Re: Room 34 Ashford Hospital by Caducus	zodiac 212.118.14.17	11-Oct-04/5:26 AM
I've found that effectively parodying this poem requires changing fewer than ten words. The last line, especially, should be changed to: with brine-shrimp tearing at my eyes. I do hope someone gives it a shot.
Re: The Mortician: Scourge of the pen. by SupremeDreamer	jroday 204.215.34.189	10-Oct-04/7:04 AM
I ENJOYED READING THIS VERY MUCH -10-
Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney	Shardik 24.130.62.63	9-Oct-04/4:40 PM
"God is dead, and no one cares... If there is a hell, I'll see you there".
Re: I Cannot Go by TLRufener	cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.21	9-Oct-04/7:47 PM
It started out alright, but then it got pretty corny.
Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney	cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.21	9-Oct-04/7:56 PM
I really liked this. It flows so well. Only problem I had was with the last 2 lines of the 8th stanza. They didn't flow as the rest of the poem did. Otherwise it's really great! ~10~
Re: Call of the Moon by arduinn	cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.21	9-Oct-04/8:01 PM
Last line-should behave be behaving? -7-
Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney	arduinn 165.21.83.230	10-Oct-04/3:18 AM
For one long poem.. This is bloody good.
Re: Cast Iron Coffin by D. $ Fontera	Rollsoftoiletpaper 152.163.101.9	10-Oct-04/7:51 AM
Interesting.
Re: Old Man by Rollsoftoiletpaper	lukehanney 144.173.6.76	10-Oct-04/1:18 PM
A mysterious, yet nice poem. We don't know who the 'Old Man' is and the repition of that phrase is very effective.
Re: Old Man by Rollsoftoiletpaper	wilco 4.227.32.45	10-Oct-04/7:18 PM
Seems to be about an abusive father. Not bad. I would maybe change this "How dare you say that I've done anything wrong in my life." , but otherwise, not bad at all.
Re: Feast On Me by cuddlytiger17	wilco 4.227.32.45	10-Oct-04/7:26 PM
If this were free verse I'd probably give it a 4 but since you called it a pimple I'll give you a 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 152.163.100.68	10-Oct-04/7:48 PM
WOW...AWESOME POEM!!!!!!! You are quite the poet! This might be my favorite poem from you...although i haven't got to read all your SIXTY poems....sheesh..good job! 10/10 ..of course...never changes!
Re: Room 34 Ashford Hospital by Caducus	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.16.109	11-Oct-04/5:46 AM
Oh goodness, your swear has sent shivers of naughtiness up and down my spine. Did you know that Hobos have a top speed of four miles per hour?
Re: Room 34 Ashford Hospital by Caducus	daggatolar 80.179.102.34	11-Oct-04/6:38 AM
to be found out that your love means nothing, unable to stop the tears from rocking down from her eyes, you deserve this rejection
Re: Missing a Line by peaceseeker	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.145.16	11-Oct-04/6:42 AM
I think it'd be a more effective metaphor than similie. I could visualize it though.
Re: She Crab by http://mulberryfairy	abecedarian 4.11.204.152	11-Oct-04/9:11 AM
A gorgeous moment. The gendering of the crab is intersting. Are you making a personal statement or merely recounting an event?
Re: One True Instant by Dovina	some deleted user 81.178.239.106	11-Oct-04/10:26 AM
Dovina, why do you write poetry. The only reason I can think of for writing poetry is to communicate something you think valuable. If you have something valuable to say surely it is important that the reader understands it as it was meant. To suggest that people interpreting it wrongly is a good thing is absurd. Hence my comment about confusion. Who would be the author of confusion? The most important thing a poet can express in my opinion is an uncertainty or an excitement over a coming together of images. In that sense the reader does not need to know what the poem means as such, rather grasp some kind of imaginary order. The Dylan Thomas poem 'the force that through the green fuse lights the flower' for instance communicates a sexual excitement understood through water on rock, quicksand stirring etc. As for the poem I believe zodiac's anger is driven by your lack of care. It is full of cliches - eyes meet, true, hope etc and seems unbothered that lines go by without offering anything ('directly in front of me the one I call husband' makes up a whole verse, it could easily make up one or two words, directly in front being redundant as it is presumed the narrator is paying attention). People make different interpretations of certain poems because the lack of depth allows them to, not because it is a good poem.