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some deleted user 81.130.200.189 |
8-Oct-04/8:21 AM |
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Ending is weak. Opening sets the example.
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| Re: It by fevriere |
Rollsoftoiletpaper 64.12.116.140 |
9-Oct-04/7:48 AM |
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| Re: Pop Quiz by steven adams |
Dovina 204.250.12.246 |
8-Oct-04/10:14 AM |
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As Samantha, I ignore them. As Steven, I'd have to act macho with a joke.
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| Re: Dancing and Talking by steven adams |
Dovina 204.250.12.246 |
8-Oct-04/10:18 AM |
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A really good thought you have here. It could be said stronger with fewer words though.
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| Re: I dreamt a white Black widow by INTRANSIT |
<~> 69.0.37.90 |
8-Oct-04/10:54 AM |
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| Re: Secretary by steven adams |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63 |
8-Oct-04/2:48 AM |
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This though, is fucking a riot, -=10=-
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| Re: Dancing and Talking by steven adams |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63 |
8-Oct-04/2:49 AM |
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This however, is a smoking turd popping corn.
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| Re: On the Discovery of Bacchus and Lovely Clothespins by MacFrantic |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63 |
8-Oct-04/2:50 AM |
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| Re: Illegal Lying Sins by Blindpoetry |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63 |
8-Oct-04/2:51 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63 |
8-Oct-04/2:52 AM |
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sliver 63.190.81.105 |
8-Oct-04/7:02 PM |
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Welcome to the world. I can't believe you'd do anything worth getting yelled at tho'. Good expression/vent.
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| Re: Nothing's Forever by cuddlytiger17 |
sliver 63.190.81.105 |
8-Oct-04/7:03 PM |
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Nothing like a nice hot shower huh?
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| Re: Clerihews (here you go, Nicholas Jones!) by Yardbird |
lukehanney 144.173.6.76 |
9-Oct-04/3:43 PM |
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A very poor, and needlessly rude example of poetry. I will admit that clerihews are not known for quality, but for wit. However, this is just rude.
By the way Nicholas Jones = Legend.
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| Re: (A)Gnostic by Nicholas Jones |
lukehanney 144.173.6.76 |
9-Oct-04/3:45 PM |
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| Re: At least by Miggy |
cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.128 |
9-Oct-04/3:49 PM |
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I really liked it. Good job. The last line of the chorus didn't flow right for me though, but that's just my opinion.
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| Re: Old Man by Rollsoftoiletpaper |
cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.128 |
9-Oct-04/4:01 PM |
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3rd line needs an "r" on "you"
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| Re: Clerihews (here you go, Nicholas Jones!) by Yardbird |
some deleted user 81.178.239.106 |
9-Oct-04/4:14 PM |
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Excellent, there can be no more fitting tribute to the poet or indeed welshness than rhyming Jones with trombone.
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Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
9-Oct-04/4:23 PM |
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cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.128 |
9-Oct-04/4:30 PM |
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:(
Overall, a really good poem. I especially liked the lines, "A memory was carved from oaks, where spiders weaved silk lairs" The last stanza was good too.
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| Re: Versions by Dovina |
jroday 204.215.34.96 |
9-Oct-04/3:51 AM |
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I like the concept of it.
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